Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, use one or two supporting details, and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct verb forms (e.g., "when I travel"). Be more specific about what you enjoy (e.g., types of scenery) and how it affects you.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy watching natural scenery. For example, I like seeing green fields and rivers, which helps me relax and think quietly during the journey.

제안: Improve sentence structure and accuracy. Begin with a concise topic sentence, then give specific reasons and one example. Use correct verb forms ("take pictures", "to save them") and avoid repeating the same idea. Include a linking word like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I often take pictures through the car window because I like to save memories of interesting landscapes. For instance, last month I photographed a terraced hillside to remember its colours and shape.

제안: Give a clear preference or a balanced answer with reasons. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., "I enjoy both, but I prefer...") then explain why using specific details and a linking phrase (e.g., "because"). Avoid fillers and short fragments; use complete sentences.

예시: I enjoy both the mountains and the sea, but if I had to choose I would prefer the mountains because I love hiking and the fresh air. However, I also enjoy the sea for relaxing on the beach and watching sunsets.

× Yes, I love to umm see uh, by the window when I traveling by bus because I enjoy watching views, beautiful views and landscaping and uh uh, nature.

✓ Yes, I love to look out of the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy watching the beautiful views, the landscape, and nature.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'see' and missing preposition 'out of' for looking through a window; present tense form 'traveling' used incorrectly after 'I' without auxiliary — should be simple present 'I travel' for habitual action; plural/singular and article issues with 'views, beautiful views and landscaping and uh uh, nature' — improved to 'the beautiful views, the landscape, and nature' for clarity and correct noun forms. Suggestion: use 'look out of' for viewing through windows, use simple present for habitual actions (I travel), include articles for specific nouns and use parallel lists separated by commas.

× This make me meditate when.

✓ This makes me feel meditative.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and missing object/phrase. 'This make' should be 'This makes' (third person singular). 'Meditate when' is incomplete and uses the verb 'meditate' awkwardly; using adjective 'meditative' or phrase 'helps me meditate' is clearer. Suggestion: use correct third person singular verb form and complete the idea: 'This makes me feel meditative' or 'This helps me meditate.'

× Yes, actually I take a lot of picture because I love to save it as a memory and I enjoy take pics for the landscape that I see it and I want to save it.

✓ Yes, actually I take a lot of pictures because I love to save them as memories and I enjoy taking pictures of the landscapes that I see and want to save.

Errors: 'a lot of picture' should be plural 'a lot of pictures'; pronoun agreement 'save it' should be 'save them' to match plural; 'take pics' should be gerund 'taking pictures' after 'enjoy'; 'for the landscape that I see it' has extra pronoun 'it' and incorrect preposition 'for' — use 'of the landscapes that I see.' Suggestion: ensure noun plurality matches pronouns and use gerund after verbs like 'enjoy'.

× I prefer them both I enjoy. Uh, sitting on the sea and uh, and I, uh, love to see a mountains. The.

✓ I enjoy both. I like sitting by the sea and I love to see the mountains.

Errors: awkward phrasing 'I prefer them both I enjoy' — split into clear sentences and use 'enjoy both' or 'I like both'; 'sitting on the sea' is incorrect preposition — use 'sitting by the sea'; 'a mountains' mixes article 'a' with plural noun 'mountains' — use 'the mountains' for general reference. Suggestion: use correct articles with count nouns, use 'by the sea' for being at the seaside, and separate ideas into complete sentences.