Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Старайтесь давать чёткий топик-сентенс и избегать долгих пауз и слов-паразитов (umm). Укажите конкретно, когда и почему вы смотрите в окно, добавьте связку для плавного развития мысли. Например: сначала скажите «Да» или «Нет», потом объясните причину и приведите пример ситуации. Также ограничьте ответ 2–4 предложениями.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing scenery. For example, I like seeing city streets and green fields pass by, which helps me relax. However, if I’m busy with my phone or talking, I sometimes don’t pay attention.

제안: Избегайте неясных конструкций и ошибок структуры предложений. Начинайте с прямого ответа («No, I don’t»), затем объясните причину с конкретикой и примером. Используйте связки (because, so, for example) и корректную грамматику: подлежащее + сказуемое. Держите длину 2–3 предложения.

예시: No, I don’t usually take photos from a moving car because the pictures often turn out blurry. For example, last time I tried to photograph a sunset from a bus and the images were too shaky to keep.

제안: Скажите чётко своё предпочтение, затем приведите конкретные причины и пример плана на будущее. Избегайте повторов и заполнителей (uh, I, I). Используйте связки (because, so, in the future) и стройте предложения грамматически корректно. Ответ должен состоять из 2–4 предложений.

예시: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. I don’t like hiking in the mountains, so the coast suits me better. In the future I would like to stay near the sea so I can swim more often.

× Not every time, but usually I umm, I look at all the window umm because I enjoyed them.

✓ Not every time, but usually I look out of the window because I enjoy it.

The student mixes past and present ('enjoyed' vs present routine) and uses incorrect preposition and pluralization ('all the window', 'them'). Use present simple for habitual actions ('I enjoy'), correct preposition 'look out of the window', and refer to 'it' (the view) as singular. Suggestions: Use present simple for routines, use 'look out of the window' or 'look at the view', and match singular/plural pronouns to the noun.

× See who? What do you do umm or umm?

✓ Who are you talking about? What do you do?

This sentence is fragmented and unclear. The speaker likely tries to ask 'Who do you mean?' or 'Who are you talking about?' and 'What do you do?' Keep each question complete and use correct word order for questions. Suggestions: Form full questions: 'Who are you talking about?' or 'Who do you mean?' and 'What do you do?'

× No, because for this is take not good.

✓ No, because taking photos from the car is not good.

The original uses incorrect word order and mixes infinitive and noun forms. After 'because' describe the action with the gerund 'taking'. Use correct adjective order 'not good' after the clause. Suggestions: Use gerund for activities (taking photos) and place adjectives correctly.

× Outside the car window and I don't like take photos at car because I feel not that good.

✓ I don't like taking photos from the car window because it doesn't work well for me.

This sentence contains improper conjunctions and verb forms. Use gerund 'taking photos', preposition 'from the car window', and a natural result clause 'it doesn't work well for me' instead of 'I feel not that good'. Suggestions: Use 'taking' for actions, 'from the car window' for location, and give natural explanations like 'it doesn't work well for me' or 'they don't turn out well'.

× I prefer sea because I like, uh, swimming and uh, at mountains.

✓ I prefer the sea because I like swimming, and I don't like hiking in the mountains.

When talking about a specific natural area, use the definite article 'the sea' and 'the mountains'. The student also omits negation and correct verb forms. Use 'don't like hiking in the mountains' to express dislike. Suggestions: Use 'the sea'/'the mountains', and complete contrasts with 'I like... and I don't like...'. Use 'hiking in the mountains' for the activity.

× I, I don't like hiking and I like swimming and I in the future I would like. Stay.

✓ I don't like hiking and I like swimming, and in the future I would like to stay near the sea.

The original repeats phrases and has sentence fragments. Use present simple for preferences ('I don't like', 'I like'), and 'would like to' plus infinitive for future wishes ('would like to stay'). Clarify the object of 'stay' as 'stay near the sea'. Suggestions: Avoid repetition, complete the infinitive after 'would like' and specify where you would like to stay.