Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答自然且直接，但有些用词和句子结构可以更简洁具体。建议用更贴切的形容词（例如 "beautiful"、"picturesque" 而不是 "sporting"），并将原因分成一句主题句和一两句具体细节，句子总数控制在3-4句内。同时使用连词（例如 "because", "so", "for example"）使逻辑更清晰。

예시: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel. I enjoy seeing new places because the landscapes and small towns are often very picturesque. For example, I like watching countryside views and historical buildings pass by.

제안: 回答表达情感明确，但句子过长且有语法小错误（例如 "make me feel breathtaking" 应为 "take my breath away" 或 "take my breath away" 的被动/主动用法）。建议将信息拆成两句：一句说明是否拍照，一句说明原因，使用更地道的短语并提供具体例子（如拍摄山景或古建筑）。

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery. I do this because beautiful views often take my breath away, and I like to look back at the pictures later to remember those moments.

제안: 结构清晰、内容具体且使用了例子，但可改进的地方是语言更自然简练并稍作扩展理由（如喜欢宁静、动植物或气候）。注意避免过多形容词堆砌，保持2-3句即可，并用连接词（like, for example）增强连贯性。

예시: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy outdoor exercise and fresh air. For example, my parents and I go hiking most weekends to keep fit and relax while enjoying peaceful scenery.

× This is because I value every chance to see new places and I love sporting landscapes, small towns and famous sites along the way.

✓ This is because I value every chance to see new places, and I love scenic landscapes, small towns, and famous sites along the way.

句中使用的形容词“sporting”不符合语境，英语中描述风景常用“scenic”。另外并列成分之间应加逗号以提高可读性，并在列举最后一项前使用逗号和连词。建议多记常用形容词搭配（如 scenic landscape, breathtaking view）。

× Yes, I take a photo to record such magnificent places which make me feel breathtaking and I hope when I am older and I can see these photos to recall those unforgettable memories.

✓ Yes, I take photos to record such magnificent places that take my breath away, and I hope when I am older I can look at these photos to recall those unforgettable memories.

原句时态和短语使用不当：1) “take a photo”在泛指习惯动作应使用复数“take photos”；2) “which make me feel breathtaking”不合逻辑，应使用短语“take my breath away”来表示令人惊叹；3) 从句中“and I hope when I am older and I can see”多余“and”，且“see these photos”更自然说法为“look at these photos”。建议注意固定搭配和时态一致性。

× Of course, I always look out the window when I travel by any form of transportation.

✓ Of course, I always look out of the window when I travel by any form of transportation.

动词短语常见搭配是“look out of the window”或更简洁的“look out the window”；两者均可，但严格书面语用“look out of the window”更常见。此处根据题目习惯应使用“look out of the window”以保持规范。建议注意介词固定搭配。

× I definitely prefer the mountains because I care deeply about my health and enjoy outdoor exercise.

✓ I definitely prefer the mountains because I care deeply about my health and enjoy outdoor exercise.

该句原本语法正确，无需修改。仅确认为一般现在时，表达习惯性偏好与事实，时态使用正确。

× For example, my parents and I often go hiking on weekends to keep fit and relax while enjoying the breathtaking scenery and fresh air.

✓ For example, my parents and I often go hiking on weekends to keep fit, relax, and enjoy the breathtaking scenery and fresh air.

原句语法基本正确，但并列动词结构更自然的表达是使用并列谓语“keep fit, relax, and enjoy...”。将并列项格式化可以使句子更清晰。建议注意并列动词的一致性和标点。