Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장이 논리적으로 연결되도록 간결하고 자연스럽게 말하세요. 현재 답변에는 반복, 시제 혼동(현재와 과거 혼용), 불필요한 단어들이 있어 이해를 방해합니다. 개선 포인트: 1) 주제문으로 명확히 시작(예: "It depends.") 2) 운전할 때와 버스로 갈 때를 현재 시제로 구분하여 간결히 설명 3) 연결어(However, when, because)를 사용해 이유를 명확히 제시 4) 불필요한 중복 표현과 머뭇거림을 줄이기

예시: It depends. When I drive, I focus on the road so I don’t look at the scenery. However, when I travel by bus I have more time to relax and enjoy the beautiful views outside the window.

제안: 간단하고 명확하게 위험 이유를 설명하세요. 현재 답변은 중복된 이유 제시와 많은 머뭇거림으로 흐름이 끊깁니다. 개선 포인트: 1) 주제문으로 바로 답하기(Yes/No + 이유) 2) 이유는 한두 문장으로 구체적이고 간결하게(예: distracting, unsafe) 3) 불필요한 반복 제거 및 정확한 표현 사용(“it’s dangerous” 대신 구체적 설명: “it distracts me and can cause accidents”)

예시: No, I don’t. Taking photos from a moving car is dangerous because it distracts the driver and increases the risk of an accident, so I avoid doing it.

제안: 선호 이유를 더 구조화하고 구체적인 예를 제시하세요. 현재 답변은 단어 선택과 문장 구조에 오류가 있어 전달력이 약합니다. 개선 포인트: 1) 명확한 주제문(“I prefer the sea.”) 2) 이유를 2개 정도 제시하고 연결어 사용(“because”, “also”) 3) 구체적인 활동 예시로 뒷받침(예: surfing, swimming) 4) 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 유지

예시: I prefer the sea because I enjoy the waves and the coastal scenery. I also love water activities like swimming and surfing, which I can’t do in the mountains.

× It depends on the case.

✓ It depends on the situation.

'Case' is grammatically possible but sounds unnatural here; 'situation' is the correct collocation with 'depends on'. Use more natural vocabulary to fit spoken English.

× If I drive a car by myself, I have no time to enjoy scenery out of the window.

✓ If I drive by myself, I don't have time to enjoy the scenery outside the window.

Use natural phrasing: omit redundant 'car' after 'drive', use contraction 'don't' for spoken tone, include definite article 'the' before 'scenery', and prefer 'outside the window'. This fixes article and word choice issues (Articles and sentence structure).

× But I go.

✓ But I do when I travel by bus.

Original is incomplete and unclear. Provide full clause to contrast driving with bus travel: 'But I do when I travel by bus.' This corrects sentence structure and clarity.

× I if I went there, went somewhere by bus, yeah, there was enough time to enjoy the beautiful scenery out of the window.

✓ If I went somewhere by bus, there was enough time to enjoy the beautiful scenery outside the window.

Remove extra words and repetition. Keep past tense 'went' and 'was' consistent. Use 'outside the window' rather than 'out of the window'. This fixes tense consistency and sentence structure.

× No, I don't take uh, photo outside of the car window because it's made dangerous actions because, umm, it's umm, it's has umm, possibility to uh, crash some some crash my hand to some.

✓ No, I don't take photos out of the car window because it is dangerous and there is a risk of my hand hitting something or getting injured.

Correct plural 'photos' and use idiomatic preposition 'out of' or better 'out of the car window' -> 'out of the car window' is acceptable but 'out of the car window' phrasing replaced by clearer 'out of the car window' remains; main fixes: plural noun, remove awkward phrasing 'made dangerous actions', use 'it is dangerous' and 'there is a risk' with noun 'hand getting injured'. Also use 'my hand' and 'hitting something' for clarity. This addresses preposition, plural, article, and sentence structure errors.

× I definitely prefer to see because there are many waves and beautiful scenery and umm where I can only enjoy it in seas and I like the aquatic sports umm umm playing only in the sea.

✓ I definitely prefer the sea because there are many waves and beautiful scenery, and I can only enjoy certain aquatic sports at the sea.

Use definite article 'the sea' for preference, not 'see'. Replace 'in seas' with 'at the sea' or 'in the sea'; better: 'at the sea' or 'in the sea' depending on activity. Clarify 'aquatic sports' and remove repetition. This fixes vocabulary (sea vs see), article use, prepositions, and sentence structure.