Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (umm) and correct verb forms and countable/uncountable nouns (music, not musics).

예시: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I usually listen to music and watch the passing landscape to relax, and sometimes I daydream about future plans while observing interesting buildings or trees.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and one clear reason with a linking word. Use correct verb patterns (used to, prefer + -ing) and avoid vague phrases like 'some photos.' Add a brief example to make the answer specific.

예시: No, I don't usually take photos from the car window because I prefer to enjoy the view in the moment. For instance, when I travel I focus on the scenery and keep my camera in my bag rather than trying to take pictures while the vehicle is moving.

제안: Answer directly, correct grammar (say 'difficult question' → 'a difficult question'), and provide two specific reasons linked logically. Avoid trailing off; finish sentences and replace informal fillers like 'yeah' with concise language.

예시: I prefer the sea to the mountains. Firstly, it's more accessible from my city, so I can visit on short trips, and secondly, I find the beach relaxing because I can swim and sunbathe without strenuous hiking.

× That's interesting question.

✓ That's an interesting question.

Missing article 'an' before 'interesting question'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Add 'an' because 'interesting' begins with a vowel sound. Suggestion: use 'an' with singular countable nouns (e.g., 'an interesting question').

× Umm, to look back at it.

✓ Umm, I like to look back at it.

Fragment lacking subject and proper verb form. The infinitive phrase 'to look back at it' is incomplete as a response. Use a finite verb form with subject 'I' to form a complete sentence: 'I like to look back at it.'

× I look out the window a lot while listening to some musics.

✓ I look out the window a lot while listening to some music.

'Music' is an uncountable noun and should not take the plural 'musics' or 'some musics'. Use 'some music' or no quantifier. Suggestion: use uncountable noun forms (e.g., 'some music').

× Umm, I like to contemplate and daydreaming while viewing the scenery outside.

✓ Umm, I like to contemplate and daydream while viewing the scenery outside.

Parallel structure error: 'like to contemplate and daydreaming' mixes infinitive ('to contemplate') with gerund ('daydreaming'). Use parallel forms: either 'like to contemplate and daydream' or 'like contemplating and daydreaming'.

× No, I'm not used to take some photos while traveling so I just see it with my eye and enjoy it alone.

✓ No, I'm not used to taking photos while traveling, so I just see them with my eyes and enjoy them alone.

'Be used to' requires a noun or gerund, so use 'taking'. Also pronoun number: 'photos' plural requires 'them' and 'eyes' plural. Added comma before 'so' to join clauses. Suggestion: use gerund after 'used to' and match pronouns to nouns.

× I don't like to share things such as photos.

✓ I don't like to share things such as photos.

This sentence is actually grammatical; however, consider simpler phrasing 'I don't like sharing photos.' No change required. (No correction applied.)

× Wow, that's actually difficult question because I like both, but if I had to choose then I would like to go to the sea.

✓ Wow, that's actually a difficult question because I like both, but if I had to choose, I would go to the sea.

Missing article 'a' before 'difficult question'. Also 'would like to go to the sea' is wordier; 'would go to the sea' is more natural in this conditional. Added comma after introductory clause for clarity.

× I prefer sea because it's easier to access, no need to sweat and yeah, it's overall easy to go to the sea and just enjoy the.

✓ I prefer the sea because it's easier to access, I don't need to sweat, and overall it's easy to go to the sea and just enjoy it.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'sea'. The phrase 'no need to sweat' is colloquial and lacks subject; change to 'I don't need to sweat'. Sentence ended with 'enjoy the.' which is incomplete; add object 'it'. Also add commas and conjunctions for clarity. Suggestion: use 'the sea' and complete clauses with subjects and objects.