Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with grammar (subject-verb agreement) and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct small errors, and add one specific detail with a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching trees and villages flash by, and the changing colors of the sky make the journey feel shorter.

제안: Correct minor grammar (plural/singular and article use) and avoid repeating words. Give one concise specific example and use a linking word to connect the reason and example.

예시: Yes, I do. If I see something beautiful, such as a dramatic sunset or an interesting street scene, I usually take a quick photo with my phone to remember it.

제안: Improve grammar and word choice (use 'calmer' or 'more peaceful' and correct noun capitalization). Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like 'Greenfield' unless clarified.

예시: I prefer the mountains because they are calmer and more peaceful than the sea. For instance, walking through green fields and pine forests helps me unwind after a busy week.

× Yes, I like looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax and the moving landscapes and the changing colors helps the journey pass quicker.

✓ Yes, I like looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax, and the moving landscapes and the changing colors help the journey pass more quickly.

The subject 'the moving landscapes and the changing colors' is plural, so the verb should be 'help' rather than 'helps' (subject-verb agreement). Also, 'quicker' modifies adjectives; use the adverb 'more quickly' to modify the verb 'pass'. Suggestion: match verb number to the subject and use adverbs to modify verbs.

× Yes I do. If I see a beautiful things such as a dramatic sunset or a beautiful Street View, I will pick up my phone to take a photo.

✓ Yes I do. If I see a beautiful thing such as a dramatic sunset or a beautiful street view, I will pick up my phone to take a photo.

The phrase 'a beautiful things' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'things'. Use singular 'a beautiful thing' or plural 'beautiful things' without 'a'. Also 'Street View' is not a proper noun here; use lowercase 'street view'. Suggestion: ensure articles match noun number and use correct capitalization for common nouns.

× I prefer the mountain because mountains are quieter and more peace than oceans, and the Greenfield helps me relax.

✓ I prefer the mountains because they are quieter and more peaceful than the ocean, and the green fields help me relax.

Several issues: 'I prefer the mountain' should be plural 'the mountains' to match general preference; 'mountains are quieter and more peace than oceans' uses uncountable noun 'peace' where an adjective 'peaceful' is needed, and comparison should pair singular/plural consistently (compare 'mountains' with 'the ocean' or 'oceans'). 'Greenfield' is incorrect as a common noun; use 'green fields' (plural) and match verb 'help' to plural subject. Suggestion: use appropriate adjective forms ('peaceful'), consistent comparison objects, and match nouns and verbs in number.