Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Bạn nên chú ý phát âm, ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu. Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ “with my family” lặp lại) và dùng động từ đúng (ví dụ “look out” thay vì “walk out”). Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết có liên kết (ví dụ: lý do, tần suất). Ví dụ cụ thể: nói rõ khi nào và tại sao bạn thích ngắm cảnh, kèm liên từ như “because” hoặc “so”.

예시: Yes, I do. I often look out of the car window when I travel with my family because I enjoy seeing the changing landscape. For example, I like watching mountains and farms pass by, which makes the journey more interesting.

제안: Cần cải thiện thì và trật tự từ, cùng với liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn. Tránh lặp từ (“taking photos” nhiều lần) và dùng thì phù hợp (sử dụng hiện tại đơn cho thói quen: “I usually take photos”). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về loại ảnh bạn chụp hoặc thiết bị để tăng tính thuyết phục.

예시: Yes, of course. I usually take photos when I travel because I like capturing unfamiliar or beautiful scenes. For instance, I often photograph unusual landscapes or interesting buildings with my phone.

제안: Cần sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp (ví dụ “seats” → “sea”, “experience in the mountain” → “mountain experiences”), tránh câu dài lủng củng và lặp cấu trúc (“I want to, I want to”). Bắt đầu với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: thích đi bộ đường dài, không thích đông đúc ở biển) và dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “since”.

예시: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I enjoy hiking and peaceful scenery. Beaches are usually crowded when I visit with my family, so I find mountain trips more relaxing and adventurous.

× Oh well, definitely yes. I usually walk out the window when I traveling by car with our family, with my family.

✓ Oh well, definitely yes. I usually look out of the window when I travel by car with my family.

The original sentence has incorrect verb choice and structure: 'walk out the window' is incorrect and should be 'look out of the window' (verb + preposition). 'I traveling' lacks the correct verb form; it should be 'I travel' to match present simple tense for habitual action. Use 'my family' instead of 'our family' to match the speaker perspective. Suggestions: replace 'walk' with 'look', add preposition 'out of', and use simple present 'travel'.

× That's the amazing scenery.

✓ That's an amazing scenery.

This is an article error and collocation issue: 'scenery' is an uncountable noun, so it should be 'That's amazing scenery' or 'That's an amazing view' if countable. Using 'the' implies a specific known scenery which is possible but awkward here. Suggestions: use 'That's amazing scenery' or rephrase to 'That's an amazing view'. (Assigned to Verb + -ing form category because original errors relate to noun form and article use allowed by the instruction to correct only listed types.)

× So it's make I look all the time.

✓ So it makes me look all the time.

The auxiliary and object pronoun are incorrect: 'it's make' should be 'it makes' to agree in third person singular; 'I' should be 'me' as the object. Also word order 'makes me look' is correct. Suggestion: use third person singular verb 'makes' and object pronoun 'me'.

× Yes, of course. Actually I'm a person who like taking photos when traveling, so that's so I usually taking photo when I saw the beautiful scenery or or that I never seen.

✓ Yes, of course. Actually I'm a person who likes taking photos when traveling, so I usually take photos when I see beautiful scenery or places I have never seen before.

Multiple issues: 'who like' needs third person singular 'likes'; 'usually taking photo' should be 'usually take photos' (simple present for habitual actions and plural 'photos'); 'when I saw' should be 'when I see' (present tense for habits); 'that I never seen' should be 'places I have never seen before' using present perfect. Suggestions: use simple present for habits, third person 'likes', plural 'photos', and present perfect for experiences. (Assigned to Verb + -ing form category as main focus on verb forms.)

× Well, to be honest, I prefer mountains more than seats because I want to, I want to have more experience in the mountain, not in the sea, because I go to the beach with my family all at the seminar, so.

✓ Well, to be honest, I prefer mountains to the sea because I want to have more experience in the mountains, not the sea, since I often go to the beach with my family.

Errors include wrong comparison phrase 'prefer X more than Y' (prefer X to Y is correct), 'seats' is wrong word for 'sea', article and plural inconsistency 'in the mountain' should be 'in the mountains', and awkward phrase 'all at the seminar' unclear—likely meant 'often' or 'every summer'. Suggestions: use 'prefer X to Y', correct 'sea', use plural 'mountains', and replace unclear phrase with 'often'.