Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers (uh, umm) and verb form errors (e.g., "when I travel").

예시: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, my husband and I enjoy watching the landscape and taking photos together, and we usually listen to music while we travel, which makes the journey relaxing.

제안: Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and reduce repetition. Give one concrete example and link it to a reason. Remove hesitations and extra phrases like "you know."

예시: Yes, I usually take a lot of photos from the window. For instance, I often photograph my husband while he smiles at the view; these pictures serve as a lovely reminder of our trips together.

제안: Structure the answer with a clear preference sentence, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words. Fix minor repetition and sentence fragments.

예시: I prefer the sea because I grew up on the island of Cuba, so the ocean feels familiar and calming. Also, I enjoy swimming and spending relaxing time at the beach with my family and husband.

× Yes, I usually look at the scenery when I traveling by bus or car, uh, with my husband actually go, you know, umm, look out and taking pictures and we really enjoy the time and I will, we like to listen to music too at the same time, and it's very fun.

✓ Yes, I usually look at the scenery when I travel by bus or car; when I go with my husband we look out, take pictures, and really enjoy the time. We also like to listen to music at the same time, and it's a lot of fun.

The original contains incorrect verb forms and inconsistent tense usage. 'I traveling' is incorrect; the base form 'travel' is required after 'when I' (present simple). 'Actually go' should be 'when I go' or 'when we go' for clarity and correct subject-verb structure. 'Look out and taking pictures' mixes base form and -ing form; parallel verbs must use the same form: 'look out, take pictures'. 'I will, we like' is inconsistent and unnecessary; use present simple 'we like'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions, keep verbs parallel, and divide long run-on sentence into clearer clauses.

× Yes, I usually takes many photos. Umm, I usually takes many photos of my husband to, for example, if he's driving and just, you know, enjoying the umm, landscape or just enjoying the music.

✓ Yes, I usually take many photos. I often take many photos of my husband, for example if he's driving and just enjoying the landscape or the music.

The subject 'I' requires the base form 'take' (not 'takes') in the present simple. 'Usually takes' is a third person singular form inappropriate for 'I'. Also streamline redundancy ('to, for example') and keep tense consistent. Suggestion: use 'I take' for habitual actions and remove extra filler words.

× I usually takes photos for of everything. It's for a nice reminder of how traveling together.

✓ I usually take photos of everything. They are a nice reminder of our travels together.

'Photos for of' is incorrect and redundant; the correct preposition is 'of'. 'It's for a nice reminder' has unclear reference and wrong number: 'photos' is plural so use 'they are'. 'How traveling together' is awkward; use 'our travels together' or 'how we travel together'. Suggestion: match noun number and pronoun references and use correct prepositions.

× I really enjoy both of them, but I think I prefer the sea because I'm from an island, Cuba, and I really enjoy the sea. Go to the sea with my my family, with my husband and just have a relaxing time there.

✓ I really enjoy both, but I prefer the sea because I'm from an island, Cuba, and I really enjoy being by the sea. I go to the sea with my family and my husband to have a relaxing time there.

'Both of them' is acceptable but 'both' is more natural. 'Go to the sea with my my family' lacks a subject and has a duplicated 'my'; it should be 'I go to the sea with my family'. Also 'enjoy the sea' can be refined to 'enjoy being by the sea'. Use present simple for habitual action: 'I go'. Suggestion: include the subject, remove duplicate words, and use correct prepositions and idiomatic expressions ('by the sea').

× I like swimming as well, so I really enjoy the scene.

✓ I like swimming as well, so I really enjoy the scenery.

The word 'scene' refers to a view in a different sense; the intended word is 'scenery' meaning landscape view. Use the correct noun. Suggestion: choose the appropriate noun 'scenery' when referring to landscapes.