Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap doğal ama düzensiz ve gramer hataları var. Net bir konu cümlesi var ama gereksiz tekrarlar ve bağlaç eksikliği konuşmanın akıcılığını azaltıyor. Spesifik olarak, 'makes our vision gets bigger' ifadesi yanlış; bunun yerine 'broadens my view' gibi doğru bir ifade kullanılmalı. Ayrıca cümleleri 2–3 kısa cümleyle sınırlayıp bağlaçlar (for example, because, so) eklemelisin. Pratik yaparken şu noktalara odaklan: 1) Basit ve doğru gramer (subject-verb agreement), 2) tekrarları azaltmak, 3) bağlaçlarla mantıksal akışı sağlamayı alışkanlık haline getirmek.

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel because it broadens my view and helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching trees and people because it makes the journey more interesting. So I usually put my phone away and focus on the scenery.

제안: Cevap doğrudan ve anlaşılır ama uzun ve tekrara meyilli. 'I take pictures of outside of our car' ifadesi daha doğal biçimde 'I take pictures from the car' olmalı. Ayrıca 'it makes me visualize even more' yerine daha uygun bir ifade seçmelisin (örneğin 'it helps me remember the scene better'). Cümleleri bağlaçlarla sadeleştirip 2–3 kısa cümlede toplamalısın. Pratikte, fotoğraf çekerken neden veya ne zaman çektiklerini belirterek cevabı zenginleştirebilirsin.

예시: Sometimes I take photos from the car, but I usually prefer to watch with my eyes because that helps me remember the view better. For instance, when the light is beautiful I might snap one picture, but mostly I enjoy observing the scene directly.

제안: Cevap net bir tercih belirtiyor fakat yapı bozuklukları, tekrarlamalar ve eksik tamamlanan düşünceler var ('it makes you feel like' tamamlanmamış). Ayrıca 'I've never been in mountains' ifadesi doğal değil; 'I've never been to the mountains' daha doğru. Cümleleri kısa, mantıklı sebeplerle destekle ve örnek ver. Son cümledeki belirsiz ifadeyi tamamla. İyileştirme alanları: 1) doğru preposition kullanımı (to the mountains), 2) bitmemiş cümleleri tamamlamak, 3) nedenleri iki kısa nokta ile açıklamak.

예시: I prefer the sea because it's more relaxing and beautiful to me. I've spent time at the beach with friends, so I enjoy swimming and sunbathing there. Although I haven't been to the mountains much, I imagine they are peaceful but less social than the seaside.

× I would love to look out the window and see all those views because it makes our vision gets bigger because nowadays and we look our phones, not just windows and all those natural things makes you feel really happy.

✓ I would love to look out the window and see all those views because it makes our vision bigger; nowadays we look at our phones instead of at windows, and all those natural things make you feel really happy.

The sentence has multiple issues but only those matching the provided list are corrected. 'makes our vision gets bigger' uses the verb gets unnecessarily after makes; use the base form after 'makes' (Verb in the present participle form/related to verb form). Change 'look our phones' to 'look at our phones' (preposition error but excluded). 'makes you feel' should be 'make you feel' to agree with plural subject 'things' (subject-verb agreement relates to verb form). Suggestions: remove the extra auxiliary 'gets' after 'makes', use base verb forms after causative 'make/makes', ensure verb agrees with its subject, and place commas or semicolons to separate clauses. Please note: explanation provided in English as requested.

× I take pictures of outside of our car but I prefer just watching by my eyes because it makes me visualize even more because nowadays we just prefer to take pictures rather than seeing directly.

✓ I take pictures of the view outside our car, but I prefer just watching with my eyes because it makes me visualize even more; nowadays we prefer taking pictures rather than seeing things directly.

Original uses 'of outside of our car' which is awkward; correct preposition is 'outside our car' or 'the view outside the car'. 'Watching by my eyes' is incorrect; use 'watching with my eyes'. Also changed 'just prefer to take pictures rather than seeing directly' to 'prefer taking pictures rather than seeing things directly' for natural phrasing. Suggestions: use appropriate prepositions ('outside', 'with'), and use gerunds after verbs like 'prefer'. Please note: explanation provided in English as requested.

× I prefer sea because it's more beautiful and more relaxing rather than mountains.

✓ I prefer the sea because it's more beautiful and more relaxing than the mountains.

'Sea' and 'mountains' need articles for clarity: 'the sea' and 'the mountains'. Also, comparative 'rather than' is less appropriate than 'than' for direct comparisons. Ensure number agreement by using articles consistently with singular and plural nouns. Suggestions: use definite articles when speaking about general categories like 'the sea' and 'the mountains', and use 'than' for comparisons. Please note: explanation provided in English as requested.

× I've never been in mountains but I've been in sea and I love sea because we can just relax and have good time with our friends in sea but in mountains it makes you feel like.

✓ I've never been to the mountains but I've been to the sea, and I love the sea because we can relax and have a good time with our friends at the beach; in the mountains, it makes you feel different.

Use of preposition 'to' is correct with 'been' (been to a place). Also articles are needed: 'the mountains', 'the sea', 'a good time'. 'Have good time' needs 'a'. 'In sea' should be 'to the sea' or 'at the beach'. The fragment 'it makes you feel like' is incomplete; supply a complete idea such as 'feel different'. Suggestions: use 'been to' for places, include articles, and complete sentence fragments. Please note: explanation provided in English as requested.