Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, grammatically correct and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words, and correct small grammar mistakes (e.g., "listen to music with my headphones", "during the journey").

예시: No, I usually sleep or listen to music with my headphones when I travel by bus or car. I prefer this because it helps me relax and make the most of the travel time, especially on long journeys.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence and give one specific reason with a linking word. Remove double negatives and repetitive phrases. Provide a brief supporting detail or example about why the photos are poor.

예시: No, I don’t take photos through the car window because reflections and dirt often spoil the images. For example, I once tried to photograph a mountain but the glare and motion made the picture unusable.

제안: Give a direct answer naming the sea or mountains, then support it with clear, specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases like "say yes" and reduce fillers such as "like" and "you know." Use linking words (because, so) to connect ideas and keep the response within 2-3 sentences.

예시: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and being close to water helps me relax. For example, listening to the waves and swimming in the sea makes me feel refreshed after a stressful week.

× No, I prefer to sleep and I prefer to listen the music in my with my headphones because, uh, I prefer to spend as much time as I can during the road.

✓ No, I prefer to sleep and I prefer listening to music with my headphones because I prefer to spend as much time as I can on the road.

The verb 'prefer' is typically followed by a gerund (verb + -ing) when stating general likes (prefer listening). Also 'listen the music' is incorrect; use 'listen to music'. 'In my with my headphones' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'with my headphones'. The phrase 'during the road' is incorrect preposition use; the correct phrase is 'on the road'. Suggestions: use gerunds after 'prefer' (prefer listening), use 'listen to', remove redundant words, and use the preposition 'on' for roads.

× No, I don't do not like taking pictures outside the car window because the pictures are awful because of the window.

✓ No, I don't like taking pictures outside the car window because the pictures turn out awful because of the window.

The sentence contains a double negative ('don't do not like') which is incorrect; use a single negative 'don't like'. The verb phrase 'are awful because of the window' is acceptable but 'turn out awful' clarifies causation. Suggestions: remove the extra 'do not' to fix the double negative and consider 'turn out' to describe photo results.

× To be honest, I prefer say yes because I really like swimming and really like just have some communication with water. Yes and like it makes me relaxed.

✓ To be honest, I would say yes because I really like swimming and I enjoy being in contact with water. It makes me feel relaxed.

Multiple sentence structure problems: 'I prefer say yes' lacks necessary infinitive or modal structure; use 'I would say yes'. 'Really like just have some communication with water' is ungrammatical—'have some communication with water' is not idiomatic; use 'being in contact with water' or 'being in the water'. The fragment 'Yes and like it makes me relaxed' is informal and poorly connected; use 'It makes me feel relaxed'. Suggestions: use appropriate modal 'would' for polite opinion, replace non-idiomatic phrases with natural expressions ('being in contact with water'), include subject and verb in each clause, and use 'feel relaxed' rather than 'makes me relaxed'.