Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 总体回答直接且相关，但存在语言不够简练、重复和个别表达不准确的问题。建议：1) 开头用一句简洁的主题句直接回答问题；2) 使用连接词（例如“and”、“so”或“for example”）组织附加信息，避免冗言；3) 改善时态和冠词使用（例如“when I'm taking the bus”可改为“when I take the bus”）；4) 尝试用更具体的细节说明拍照情形（拍什么、为什么拍）。

예시: Yes, I do. I often look out of the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy watching changing landscapes. For example, if I see an interesting building or a beautiful sunset, I usually stop and take a photo to remember it.

제안: 回答很简短且有口语填充和语法问题（如“when after I've got a phone”不正确）。建议：1) 用更自然准确的表达解释拍照的原因；2) 避免含糊的短语，给出具体场景或例子；3) 用连接词扩展细节但不超过五句。

예시: Yes, definitely. I usually take photos when I spot something striking, such as a colorful sunset or an unusual building. For instance, last month I photographed a bright mural I saw from the car because it was unique and colorful.

제안: 回答意思明确但表达混乱，存在多处语法错误、填充词和不连贯片段。建议：1) 开门见山说出偏好并给出一到两条具体理由；2) 使用连接词（for example, because）使句子流畅；3) 避免含糊词汇（like 'stuff'、重复性的短语），用更具体的名词描述（trees, meadows, wildlife）；4) 控制长度，不超过五句。

예시: I prefer the mountains because they offer more varied scenery and wildlife. For example, you can see forests, open meadows and sometimes wild animals, which makes hiking and sightseeing more interesting.

× Every time I go travelling, when I'm taking the bus or when there's scenery outside, I will look out the window and see the view and then if there's anything special I will take photos of it.

✓ Every time I go travelling, when I'm taking the bus or when there's scenery outside, I look out of the window and see the view, and if there's anything special I take photos of it.

句中原用“will”表示习惯性动作不自然。英文中描述经常或习惯性行为宜用一般现在时（或现在进行时表示正在发生的动作），例如“I look out of the window”或“when I'm taking the bus”。另外，“look out the window”更常用“look out of the window”。建议：描述习惯用一般现在时，避免在同一句中混用将来式表示习惯。

× I won't get tired looking at the scenery.

✓ I don't get tired of looking at the scenery.

英文中表达“对……不感到厌倦”应使用固定搭配“get tired of doing something”。原句用“won't get tired”含将来否定且缺少介词“of”，不符合语义。建议记住固定短语“get tired of”。

× I'm sure it's just an instinctive behaviour when you see something really beautiful, or at least when after I've got a phone.

✓ I'm sure it's just an instinctive behaviour when you see something really beautiful, or at least when I have a phone with me.

原句“or at least when after I've got a phone”结构混乱，包含多余的连词/介词“after”和不自然的时态表达。应简化为“or at least when I have a phone with me”意为“至少当我带着手机时”。建议：表达习惯性或条件时用简单清晰的从句结构，避免不必要的词。

× Other tart issues, but I think I'll go with the mountains because in the mountains you will have a lot more to see, especially when you're talking about looking at the view.

✓ Other than that, I think I'll go with the mountains because in the mountains you have a lot more to see, especially when you're talking about the view.

原句开头应为短语“Other than that”而不是“Other tart issues”。另外句中“You will have”用于一般陈述显得不自然，描述普遍情况应使用一般现在时“you have”。建议：修正拼写错误并使用适当时态来表达普遍事实。

× Umm you, you will see trees like grasslands, the sometimes animals you can see big animals and stuff.

✓ You can see trees, grasslands, and sometimes large animals and so on.

原句词序混乱且词类使用不当：“trees like grasslands”把名词当作比较对象且语义错误，“the sometimes animals”语序和限定词错误。应按并列名词列出景物，并用“sometimes large animals”表达“有时能看到大型动物”。建议：按并列结构列举项，确保形容词放在名词前（large animals），避免口语填充词影响表达。