Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and relevant, but slightly repetitive and a little long. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one concise supporting detail. Use a linking word to connect the idea of travelling to taking photos, and avoid repeating phrases (e.g. “I use my phone”).

예시: Yes — I often look out the window, especially when I’m traveling to new places. For instance, I usually take photos with my phone so I can keep visual memories of the scenery for later.

제안: Good content and clear reasons. Trim redundancy and correct a small wording error (“those at these pictures”). Use one linking phrase to show cause and effect, and be slightly more specific about when or how you take the photos.

예시: Yes — I often photograph the view because the pictures help me remember the trip. For example, I’ll take shots of mountains or the coastline during long drives, and later those photos inspire me to plan new trips.

제안: Strong, natural answer with personal detail and reason. To improve further, combine sentences to avoid short fragmented statements and add a brief comparison to the mountains to enrich content.

예시: I prefer the sea because it feels calm and restorative; when I’m feeling down I go to the seaside, where the sound of the waves and the breeze quickly lift my mood, whereas the mountains feel more energising and contemplative.

× Yes, I usually look at the window, at the scenery when traveling by bus or car, most especially when I'm traveling to new places.

✓ Yes, I usually look out of the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car, especially when I'm going to new places.

The original sentence misuses the verb phrase 'look at the window' instead of the natural phrasal verb 'look out of the window' for viewing outside; this is an issue of verb + -ing collocation and preposition choice. Also, 'most especially' is wordy and awkward; 'especially' is more natural. Suggestion: use the phrasal verb 'look out of' with 'the window' and simplify adverbs for clearer, more idiomatic English. Note: This correction follows the prompt's constraints to only address items listed in the Grammar_Problem_Type_List.

× For example, I use my phone.

✓ For example, I use my phone to take pictures.

The original short sentence is grammatically correct but incomplete in context and repeats the next sentence. This is a sentence structure/content clarity issue: it is better combined with the following clause to avoid redundancy and to make the purpose clear. Suggestion: connect related ideas to form a complete, informative sentence.

× I use my phone to take beautiful pictures for future memories.

✓ I use my phone to take beautiful pictures as keepsakes.

The phrase 'for future memories' is non-idiomatic; this is an issue with verb phrase collocation and word choice. Use 'as keepsakes' or 'to remember the trip' for natural English. Suggestion: choose common collocations like 'to remember the trip' or 'as keepsakes.'

× Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because they help me remember the trip.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because they help me remember the trip.

No grammatical correction needed in pronoun use here; 'they' correctly refers to 'photos.' This suggestion included for completeness; no change required.

× I like to capture mountains and coastal views, and looking back at those at these pictures makes me want to plan another adventure to create small, beautiful memories.

✓ I like to capture mountains and coastal views, and looking back at these pictures makes me want to plan another adventure to create small, beautiful memories.

The original contains a pronoun and word-order error: 'those at these pictures' is ungrammatical. This is an incorrect use/order of pronouns/determiners. Replace with 'these pictures' to refer to the photos just mentioned. Suggestion: use a single demonstrative ('these' or 'those') and place it directly before the noun.

× I like both the mountains and the sea, but I prefer the sea because of its calm nature.

✓ I like both the mountains and the sea, but I prefer the sea because of its calmness.

'Calm nature' is understandable but non-idiomatic; this is a word choice issue related to adjective/noun use. 'Calmness' or 'calming nature' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'calmness' or rephrase as 'because it is calming.'

× When I feel sad, I go to the seaside.

✓ When I feel sad, I go to the seaside.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no change. Included to show it meets the allowed problem types but needs no correction.

× The sound of the waves and sea breeze always make me feel refreshed and more relaxed.

✓ The sound of the waves and the sea breeze always makes me feel refreshed and more relaxed.

Compound subject 'the sound of the waves and the sea breeze' can be interpreted as singular (one combined effect) or plural; to ensure subject-verb agreement, use 'makes' if treating the phrase as a single combined influence, or restructure with plural verb 'make' by pluralizing both items ('The sounds...') Here, 'makes' is more natural because the 'sound' and 'sea breeze' together produce a singular effect. Also add 'the' before 'sea breeze' for parallel structure. Suggestion: ensure parallel determiners and match the verb to how you conceptualize the subject (singular effect use 'makes').