Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh), correct grammar (e.g. “when I travel by bus or car”), and use one or two specific supporting details. Use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes. I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing new places and landscapes. For example, I like spotting interesting buildings and parks along the route. Also, watching the scenery helps me know when my stop is coming, so I don’t miss it.

제안: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement, give a specific reason and an example, and remove fillers. Use appropriate vocabulary (take photos, capture scenery, keep memories). Keep it within three sentences.

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car, especially on long trips, to capture beautiful landscapes and wildlife. For instance, last summer I photographed a river valley at sunset and later used those pictures to remember the trip. These photos help me preserve memories and share them with family.

제안: Give a direct preference and support it with specific reasons and a contrast using a linking word (however, but). Clean up grammar (e.g. “I live in a place full of mountains”) and avoid fillers. One to three sentences is enough.

예시: I prefer both, but I usually see the mountains more because I live in a region full of hills. However, I like visiting the sea because its calm waves and fresh air give me a peaceful, relaxing break.

× Yes, usually when I travel to bus or car, uh, I look out to the window so that I can see the places, uh, and good sceneries and also it also help helpful for me to get out of the best, uh, the right stop at the base.

✓ Yes, usually when I travel by bus or car, I look out of the window so that I can see the places and good scenery, and it also helps me get off at the right stop.

Errors: incorrect article and preposition with transportation ('travel by bus or car' not 'travel to bus or car'); incorrect preposition with 'look out of' not 'look out to'; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun so 'good scenery' not 'good sceneries'; redundant words 'also it also help helpful' and wrong verb form 'help' (subject-verb agreement). Suggestions: use 'travel by' for modes of transport, 'look out of the window', use uncountable nouns correctly ('scenery'), remove redundancy and ensure verb agrees with subject ('it also helps').

× We won't be in uh, we won't, we will miss the time and.

✓ We might miss the stop if we're not careful.

Error: sentence fragment and incorrect modal/time expression. The original uses 'won't be in' and 'we will miss the time' which is unclear. Suggestion: express possibility with modal verbs and complete the idea; use 'might miss the stop' to indicate potential outcome and make sentence complete.

× Yes, I usually take some photos, uh, when I'm traveling on the car, especially when, uh, when we are out for a long trip so that we can capture some beautiful sceneries and, uh, nature and so that we can, uh, view it later, uh, and keep us in memory.

✓ Yes, I usually take some photos when I'm traveling by car, especially on long trips so that we can capture beautiful scenery and nature to view later and keep as memories.

Errors: preposition with vehicle ('by car' not 'on the car'); 'sceneries' should be 'scenery' (uncountable); awkward phrase 'keep us in memory' should be 'keep as memories'. Suggestions: use 'traveling by car', use uncountable nouns correctly, and use natural collocations like 'keep as memories' or 'remember'.

× I prefer both, but I usually, uh, get the chance to see the mountains, uh, mainly because, uh, I live in a place where full of mountains and hilly areas.

✓ I prefer both, but I usually get the chance to see the mountains mainly because I live in a place full of mountains and hilly areas.

Errors: unnecessary commas and filler words; incorrect phrase 'a place where full of' should be 'a place full of' or 'a place that is full of'. Suggestions: remove filler words for clarity and use correct structure 'a place full of mountains'.

× So but I really go visit the seas, which give me some peaceful moment.

✓ But I really like visiting the seaside, which gives me peaceful moments.

Errors: awkward connector 'So but'; verb phrase 'go visit the seas' is unnatural; 'seas' plural plus 'which give me some peaceful moment' has subject-verb disagreement and singular/plural mismatch. Suggestions: use natural noun 'the seaside' or 'the sea', 'visit' with correct subject-verb agreement 'gives', and pluralize 'moment' to 'moments' or use 'a peaceful moment'.