Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, ngắn gọn và mạch lạc. Học sinh nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và lỗi phát âm/ghi âm (ví dụ: “Is it 881 of my hobbies” không phù hợp). Nên sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (for example, because, so) và cung cấp một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về lý do hoặc cảm nhận khi ngắm cảnh. Giữ tối đa 4-5 câu để tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

예시: Yes, I always look out of the window when travelling by bus or car. I enjoy watching changing landscapes because they help me relax and think. For example, I like seeing fields and small villages because they remind me of childhood trips. So, looking outside is both entertaining and calming for me.

제안: Cần cấu trúc câu rõ ràng và loại bỏ các từ thừa hoặc lỗi (ví dụ “Ace is the answer” không rõ nghĩa). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn về việc bạn chia sẻ ảnh. Dùng liên từ như because, so, and để câu mạch lạc. Tránh lặp ý và giữ 3–4 câu.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I find it interesting. Taking pictures helps me remember beautiful places and moments. For instance, I often share these photos with my family on social media so they can see what I experienced.

제안: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, rõ ý và dùng thì, cấu trúc phù hợp (ví dụ: change “if I was born” to “since I was born”). Nên nêu trực tiếp sở thích, lý do cụ thể và một mô tả ngắn. Sử dụng liên từ (because, since) để kết hợp lý do. Giữ 2–3 câu đủ để tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

예시: I prefer the sea because it makes me feel relaxed after a busy week. Since I grew up in a mountainous area, the seaside is a nice change and I enjoy walking along the coast and listening to the waves.

× Absolutely yes, I prefer to look at the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car. Is it 881 of my hobbies And I think that it is also the correct way to keep it in my mind and I and I find out look how the scenery is a also help me to relax.

✓ Absolutely. I prefer to look out of the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car. It is one of my hobbies, and I think it is a good way to keep memories. I also find that looking at the scenery helps me to relax.

Errors include incorrect preposition use ('look at the window' should be 'look out of the window'), sentence structure problems (run-on sentences and unclear phrases like 'Is it 881 of my hobbies', 'I and I find out look how the scenery is a also'), and article/word choice issues ('a also' → 'also'). Suggestions: use 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window', split ideas into clear sentences, replace unclear fragments with 'It is one of my hobbies' and use 'helps me to relax' for correct verb agreement and clarity.

× Absolutely, I find I take photos of the scenery outside the car window it extremely interesting and it also one of my hobbies. Ace is the answer to a great way to keep this memory into my mind and I can share it to my friends, to my parents to spread my experience.

✓ Absolutely. I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window; I find it extremely interesting, and it is one of my hobbies. It is a great way to keep memories, and I can share them with my friends and parents to share my experiences.

Problems: run-on sentences and missing verbs ('it also one of my hobbies' needs 'is'), incorrect words ('Ace' likely meaningless), wrong preposition ('into my mind' → 'keep memories'), pronoun number mismatch ('this memory' → 'them' for photos). Suggestions: add necessary verbs, split long sentences with punctuation, use 'it is one of my hobbies', 'keep memories' or 'preserve memories', and 'share them with' for correct pronoun and preposition use.

× Well personally if I prefer the seas, if I was born in a mountainous area and I find out the sea makes me feel relaxed and I fancy going along the coastal and enjoying the seaside view.

✓ Well, personally I prefer the sea. If I had been born in a mountainous area, I might prefer the mountains, but the sea makes me feel relaxed and I enjoy walking along the coast and enjoying the seaside view.

Errors: incorrect conditional structure and tense ('if I prefer the seas, if I was born' is confusing), plural/article issues ('the seas' → 'the sea'; 'the coastal' → 'the coast'), unnecessary phrases ('I find out'). Suggestions: use a clear conditional ('If I had been born... I might prefer...'), use singular 'sea' for the general concept, 'coast' for the shoreline, and remove 'find out'. Use 'I enjoy walking along the coast' for natural expression.