Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also avoid incorrect verb forms (use "listen to music") and unnecessary filler words.

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes because they help me relax; moreover, I usually listen to music to focus my thoughts during long journeys.

제안: Correct grammar and be specific. Use present tense for habitual actions and avoid unclear phrases ("photos of the wheel"). Provide a brief reason or example and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car window when the view is nice. For instance, if I see a sunset or an interesting landscape and the window is clean, I will quickly take a picture to remember it.

제안: Give a clear preference with organized supporting reasons and avoid contradictions and fillers. Use linking words (however, because) and correct grammar ("mountains look", "I prefer"). Provide one or two concise reasons with specific examples.

예시: I prefer the sea because its sound and open horizon relax me. However, I also admire mountains for their dramatic views and hiking opportunities, so I enjoy both depending on my mood.

× Yeah, I'll look at the window when I, when I'm traveling, uh, and I listen music, uh, it helps me to, uh, focus on my thoughts and umm, yeah.

✓ Yeah, I look out the window when I'm traveling, and I listen to music; it helps me focus on my thoughts.

The student used 'I'll look' which implies future; the context is habitual action so present simple 'I look' is appropriate (Grammar Problem Type 8 and 6). More importantly, 'listen music' is missing the preposition 'to' (preposition error, Grammar Problem Type 11). Combine clauses and remove filler words for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I look out the window' for habitual actions and 'listen to music'.

× Yeah, I take photos when I was in car.

✓ Yeah, I take photos when I'm in the car.

The sentence incorrectly mixes present habitual 'I take photos' with past tense 'when I was'. Use present tense 'when I'm in the car' for habitual action (Grammar Problem Type 5). Also include the article 'the' before 'car' (Grammar Problem Type 22). Suggestion: keep tenses consistent and include articles where needed.

× If I see a beautiful view and it's the windows is not dirty, I can take the photos of the wheel.

✓ If I see a beautiful view and the window is not dirty, I can take photos of the view.

The original has several errors: 'it's the windows is not dirty' is ungrammatical and mixes singular/plural; use 'the window is not dirty' (Grammar Problem Type 17 and 1). 'Take the photos of the wheel' is incorrect; likely meant 'take photos of the view' (wrong noun choice and article use). Also omit unnecessary 'the' before 'photos' for general meaning (Grammar Problem Type 22). Suggestion: choose consistent singular/plural and correct nouns: 'window' and 'view'.

× I think in photos the mountains, uh, looks more beautiful than the sea,

✓ I think in photos the mountains look more beautiful than the sea,

Subject-verb agreement: 'mountains' is plural so the verb should be 'look' not 'looks' (Grammar Problem Type 1 and 27). Suggestion: match plural subjects with base verb form in present simple: 'mountains look'.

× but I like the sea views because it helps me to calm and relax.

✓ but I like sea views because they help me calm down and relax.

Pronoun 'it' refers to 'sea views' which is plural, so use 'they' (Grammar Problem Type 12). 'Helps me to calm and relax' is awkward; use 'help me calm down and relax' and omit 'the' before 'sea views' for general meaning (Grammar Problem Type 13 and 22). Suggestion: ensure pronoun agrees in number and use natural verb patterns: 'help me calm down'.

× But the mountain, it's so umm, a mistake and also relaxing Uh yeah, I.

✓ But the mountains are also very peaceful and relaxing.

Original is unclear and ungrammatical: 'it's so... a mistake' makes no sense in context. Likely intended to say mountains are peaceful and relaxing. Use plural 'mountains' to match earlier reference and plural verb 'are' (Grammar Problem Type 26 and 1). Remove fillers and incomplete fragments. Suggestion: form a complete, clear sentence like 'But the mountains are also very peaceful and relaxing.'