Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and hesitations (e.g., "yeah"). Also correct verb forms ("when I travel").

예시: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes like fields and small towns, which makes the journey feel shorter.

제안: Give a clear reason and specific example, use correct vocabulary and avoid repetition. Start with a direct answer, then explain why and give one example. Replace vague or incorrect phrases ("the fuse") with accurate words ("views").

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because the views can be very beautiful. For example, I once captured a golden sunset behind a row of trees, which helped me remember that trip.

제안: Answer directly and use clear reasons with linking words. Fix grammar ("climbing mountains" or "the mountains"), remove hesitations, and provide one specific detail about what you like. Keep it to two or three sentences.

예시: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy climbing and the panoramic views from the summit. For instance, when I reach the top I can see valleys and rivers spread out, which makes the effort worthwhile.

× Yes, I do look. I do like to look out the window when I traveling by bus or car because it can help me to Yeah I enjoy doing it and it can help me to relieve my stress by looking out of the window to know more about the views and my journey.

✓ Yes, I do. I like to look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me. I enjoy doing it and it helps me relieve stress by looking out of the window to see more of the views and my journey.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'traveling' after 'when I' (should be base form 'travel') and inconsistent use of auxiliary 'do' and filler 'Yeah'. Also 'can help me to' is awkward; use present simple 'helps me' for habitual actions. Suggestion: use simple present for habits, remove unnecessary fillers, use 'look out of the window' and 'see' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, I like taking photos outside the car windows because it can the fuse can be really uh, beautiful and I would like to recall the moment and and they can help me to form just re record them.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos outside the car window because the views can be really beautiful and I would like to recall the moments and they can help me to record them.

Errors: 'car windows' should be singular 'car window' when referring to the window of one car; 'the fuse' is incorrect word choice—should be 'the views'; repetition and filler words present. Use plural 'moments' if referring to multiple memories. Suggestion: choose correct noun 'views', correct article usage, remove fillers, and use 'record' instead of 're record'. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I prefer uh, climbing a mountains because, uh, when I climb to the top place, uh, it can I when I look down of the mountain, I can see so many beautiful views.

✓ I prefer climbing mountains because when I reach the top, I can look down the mountain and see many beautiful views.

Errors: 'a mountains' mixes singular article with plural noun; should be 'climbing mountains' or 'climbing a mountain'. 'Top place' is unnatural—use 'top' or 'summit'. 'Look down of the mountain' is incorrect preposition; use 'look down the mountain' or 'look down from the mountain'. Suggestion: fix article-number agreement, use natural phrases 'reach the top' and correct preposition 'from' if used. Grammar problem type ID:1