Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha doğal ve doğrudan olmalı. Başlangıçta açık bir konu cümlesi kurun (ör. hangi taşıma aracında manzaraya baktığınız). Gerektiğinde nedenine dair kısa ve net destekleyici cümleler ekleyin. Ayrıca gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini (uh, um) azaltın. Örnek yapı: konu cümlesi + bir neden + kısa örnek; toplam 1–3 cümle yeterlidir.

예시: I usually look out of the window when I travel by car because I enjoy watching the passing streets and buildings. For longer trips by bus I sometimes sleep or read, so I don’t always pay attention to the scenery.

제안: Cevap daha doğru dilbilgisi ve özgüllük içermeli. ‘Secondary’ yerine doğru kelimeyi (scenery) kullanın ve basit bir neden veya sıklık belirtin (ör. always, often, rarely). Ayrıca bir örnek ekleyin. Cümleleri düzgün yapılandırmak için yardımcı fiil ve zaman kullanımına dikkat edin.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car because I want to remember interesting places. For example, I usually photograph colourful houses or unusual landscapes when I travel.

제안: Cevap açık bir tercih ile başlamalı ve tercih gerekçesi kısa ve net olmalı. Korku veya neden belirtirken daha doğal ve doğru bir dil kullanın (ör. I'm afraid of heights). Gerekirse karşılaştırma ekleyin (ör. sea is relaxing; mountains are adventurous). Toplam 2–3 cümle ile net ifade edin.

예시: I usually prefer the sea because I find it relaxing and I enjoy swimming. Sometimes I like the mountains too, but I avoid very high places because I’m afraid of heights.

× I usually prefer, uh, car or by bus, uh, where go look.

✓ I usually prefer to travel by car or by bus when I want to look at the scenery.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing verbs. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). To fix it, use the verb phrase 'prefer to travel' and place the purpose clause 'when I want to look at the scenery' at the end. Also keep parallel forms: 'by car or by bus'. Suggested improvement: start with the subject 'I', use 'prefer to' + verb, and maintain parallel prepositional phrases.

× I like take photos of the secondary outside.

✓ I like to take photos of the scenery outside the car window.

This sentence has two issues: missing particle after 'like' and a wrong noun 'secondary' instead of 'scenery', so it's covered by article/structure problems (IDs 22 and 26). Use 'like to take' or 'like taking', and use the correct noun 'scenery'. Also specify 'outside the car window' to match the question. Suggested improvement: use 'I like to take photos' or 'I like taking photos' and check noun spelling and context.

× Uh, usually I prefer sea, uh, but sometimes mountains, uh, why sometimes, uh, I, I'm scared the high, that's why I see.

✓ Usually I prefer the sea, but sometimes I prefer the mountains. Sometimes I am scared of heights, so I don't look down.

Multiple errors: missing definite article before 'sea' and 'mountains' when speaking generally (ID 22), awkward sentence structure (ID 26), incorrect phrase 'scared the high' which should be 'scared of heights' (ID 11 for preposition plus noun). The corrected version adds 'the' before 'sea' and clarifies both preferences. Use 'scared of heights' and a clear consequence 'so I don't look down'. Suggested improvement: use articles with geographical features when appropriate, use 'scared of' + noun, and split ideas into separate sentences for clarity.