Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ в целом хороший: есть прямая тема и примеры. Улучшите грамматику и связность, используя одно-два связующих слова и простое уточнение. Также избегайте лишней запятой перед «because» и не перечисляйте слишком много элементов без связки.

예시: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel because I enjoy seeing the scenery. For example, I like views of the seaside and mountains, and I often notice different kinds of forests as we drive.

제안: Ответ понятен, но есть разговорные вставки («Uh, yeah») и грамматические неточности: «do it» и «make photos» лучше заменить на «take photos». Повтор «because» стоит убрать и дать причину одним предложением. Также можно добавить связующее слово для логики.

예시: Sometimes I take photos from the car, but I usually avoid it because the pictures often come out blurred due to the car's movement.

제안: Ответ содержит идеи, но много грамматических ошибок и неясных формулировок: неверные формы глаголов, порядок слов и повторы. Надо использовать простое связное предложение с пояснением и примером, избегать лишних фраз и исправить прилагательные и глаголы.

예시: I prefer the sea because it has a lovely, relaxing atmosphere that makes me feel calm. Also, I enjoy swimming there. Mountains are beautiful too, but for me the sea is more relaxing.

× Of course I do, because it's interesting to see the views, for example the seaside, mountains or different types of forests.

✓ Of course I do because it's interesting to see the views, for example the seaside, the mountains, or different types of forests.

The sentence needs definite articles before plural nouns when referring to specific types (the seaside, the mountains). Also remove the extra comma after 'do'. Use commas consistently between items. Suggestion: include 'the' before 'mountains' and 'seaside' to specify these places and keep comma usage minimal.

× Uh, yeah, sometimes I do it, but I don't like to make photos from the car because they're usually not clear because of the car's moves.

✓ Uh, yeah, sometimes I do, but I don't like taking photos from the car because they're usually not clear due to the car's movement.

Use the gerund 'taking photos' rather than 'make photos' (verb + -ing issue). Remove the pronoun 'it' which is unnecessary. Replace 'because of the car's moves' with 'due to the car's movement' for natural collocation and singular noun 'movement' rather than plural 'moves'.

× I prefer sea because of that lovely atmosphere, it's make me feel comfort and relaxing.

✓ I prefer the sea because of that lovely atmosphere; it makes me feel comfortable and relaxed.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'sea' when speaking about the sea in general. Change 'it's make' to 'it makes' (third person singular verb issue). Use the adjective 'comfortable' and the past participle/adjective 'relaxed' rather than 'comfort and relaxing'. Use a semicolon or period to separate clauses for clarity.

× Also I like to see because you can swim there.

✓ Also, I like it because you can swim there.

Add a comma after 'Also'. Include the direct object 'it' after 'like' (incorrect sentence structure). The original 'like to see' is vague; 'like it because you can swim there' clarifies meaning.

× But the mountain is the beautiful too, but not as the sea.

✓ But the mountains are beautiful too, although not as much as the sea.

Use plural 'mountains' to match general reference (singular/plural issue). Remove the unnecessary article 'the' before 'beautiful'. Use correct comparative structure 'not as much as the sea' rather than 'not as the sea'. Also replace the repeated 'but' with 'although' for smoother conjunction use.