Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子结构不够自然，存在语法错误和冗长表达。答题没有明确的主题句和清晰的衔接词，部分细节模糊（例如“the pass by people”不清楚）。建议用一到两句开头直接回答问题，然后用1–2句具体且连贯的细节支持，注意主谓一致、时态和介词用法，减少重复。可以练习用连词（for example, and, which）和简洁短句提高流利度。

예시: Yes. I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel alone. For example, I like watching changing mountains and smiling people passing by, which often leaves a strong impression on me.

제안: 表达有逻辑但句子过长且存在语法问题（如“take photos about”应为“take photos of”；时态混用“take”与“returned”）。建议先直接回答，然后用一到两句说明原因并举例，注意动词短语和时态一致，使用连词使句子更流畅。

예시: Yes, definitely. I often take photos of mountains, clouds and small villages, because when I look at them later I can recall how I felt at that moment.

제안: 回答明确但有语法和措辞错误（如“a person who born”应为“a person who was born”或“I was born”; 重复“coast coast”）。建议先简短直接回答偏好，然后给出一至两句具体原因或描绘感受，注意使用正确的从句和简洁表达。

예시: I prefer the sea. I was born near a big mountain, so when I have the choice I like wandering along the coast and breathing the salty air because it feels very relaxing.

× Actually on a solo trip lover.

✓ Actually, I'm a solo-travel lover.

原句结构不完整且用词顺序错误。应使用主语+系动词+表语结构来表达“我是一个喜欢独自旅行的人”。建议使用“I am”或缩写“I'm”，并把“solo-travel lover”作为表语。这样句子完整且符合英语习惯。

× So when I take a solo trip on bus or car I really enjoy looking out the windows, seeing different kinds of mountains and the pass by people with a smiling face which all left a deep impression on myself.

✓ So when I take a solo trip by bus or car, I really enjoy looking out the windows, seeing different kinds of mountains and the passing people with smiling faces, which all leave a deep impression on me.

句中有多个问题：1) 介词使用不当，应使用“by bus or car”（见下一个错误类型）；2) “the pass by people”应改为“the passing people”或“people passing by”，这是现在分词作定语的用法；3) “a smiling face”应为复数“smiling faces”，与前面的复数people一致；4) “which all left a deep impression on myself”时态与代词不当，应改为“which all leave a deep impression on me”。建议注意分词作定语、主谓一致和代词使用（用me而不是myself）。

× So when I take a solo trip on bus or car I really enjoy looking out the windows...

✓ So when I take a solo trip by bus or car, I really enjoy looking out the windows...

介词“on”在交通工具前通常用于“on a bus/on a train”表示在车辆上，但更自然的表达为“by bus/by car”表示交通方式。此处使用“by”更符合习惯用法。建议记住固定搭配：by + 交通方式（without article）表示乘坐方式。

× which all left a deep impression on myself.

✓ which all leave a deep impression on me.

“myself”是反身代词，仅在需要反身强调或动词的宾语与主语相同时使用。此处应使用宾格“me”。同时时态应与上下文保持一致，改为现在时的“leave”。建议用正确的人称代词（me/you/him/her/us/them）而不是反身代词。

× Yes, definitely, because when I take photos about the different mountains, clouds or some small villages and after I returned home, I could look these pictures to find the feeling of me at that time.

✓ Yes, definitely, because when I take photos of different mountains, clouds or small villages, and after I return home, I can look at these pictures to recall how I felt at that time.

几处错误：1) 动词短语应为“take photos of”而非“take photos about”；2) 时态不一致，“after I returned home”与一般现在时上下文不匹配，应改为“after I return home”；3) “look these pictures”缺少介词，应为“look at these pictures”；4) “find the feeling of me at that time”表达不自然，应改为“recall how I felt at that time”。建议注意固定搭配（take photos of, look at）和时态一致性。

× Actually I'm a person who born in a city with a huge mountain, so if I were given a choice, I prefer to go for a beach and just wander around the coast coast and feel the salty air.

✓ Actually, I was born in a city with a huge mountain, so if I were given a choice, I would prefer to go to a beach and just wander along the coast and feel the salty air.

问题包括：1) “who born”缺少被动助动词，应为“was born”；2) 时态与虚拟语气搭配错误，“if I were given a choice”是虚拟条件，应与“would prefer”连用而不是现在时“prefer”；3) 介词和搭配错误，“go for a beach”应为“go to a beach”；4) 重复用词“coast coast”应为“coast”，并且更自然用“wander along the coast”。建议注意被动结构（was born）、虚拟语气（would + 动词）和常用介词搭配。