Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. For example, say 'Yes, I like looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car.' Then add a specific reason using a linking word: 'because' or 'as'.

예시: Yes, I like looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching changing landscapes, such as fields and small towns, which helps me relax during the journey.

제안: Organize your answer into one clear statement and one specific supporting detail. Avoid unclear phrases and unnecessary repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and use natural expressions for relaxing (e.g. 'to unwind').

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I want to capture interesting views, such as sunsets or mountain roads, and look back on them later to remember the trip.

제안: Give a direct answer (mountains or the sea) first, then provide one or two specific reasons with clear vocabulary. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'win' or 'when I listened'. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'so' correctly.

예시: I prefer the sea because the sound of waves and the wide horizon make me feel relaxed and calm, and I enjoy walking along the beach to clear my mind.

× Yes, when I traveling by bus or car I really like Lookout looking out the windows for the scenery because it's really such good moments for me.

✓ Yes, when I travel by bus or car I really like looking out of the windows at the scenery because those are such good moments for me.

The original has incorrect verb form 'traveling' after 'when I' and redundant capitalized 'Lookout looking'. Use base form 'travel' after 'when I' for simple present habit. Use 'looking' as the correct -ing form for the verb of preference. Use 'looking out of the windows at the scenery' for correct preposition use and change 'it's really such good moments' to 'those are such good moments' to match plural 'moments' and correct subject reference.

× Yes, I would like to take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it's really good moments for me to capture the beautiful views, to put my photo, to put my phone and sometimes I can when I really feel the unwind.

✓ Yes, I like to take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it is a good way for me to capture beautiful views, put my phone away, and relax when I need to unwind.

Issues: 'would like to' suggests conditional rather than habitual; use 'like to' for habitual action. 'it's really good moments' is ungrammatical — use 'it is a good way' or 'those are good moments'. Phrases 'to put my photo, to put my phone' are unclear; likely 'put my phone away'. 'sometimes I can when I really feel the unwind' is incorrect wording — use 'and relax when I need to unwind.' Also changed verb forms to fit present habitual context.

× I would like to choose say because umm, when I saw the beautiful ocean, I felt such unwind and relaxing.

✓ I would choose the sea because when I see the beautiful ocean, I feel relaxed and calm.

Problems: 'choose say' is unclear; likely 'choose the sea'. Tense inconsistency: question asks preference generally, so use present simple 'I would choose' or 'I choose'; 'when I saw' (past) should be present 'when I see' for general statements. 'I felt such unwind and relaxing' is ungrammatical — use adjective 'relaxed' and 'calm' (adjectives) rather than noun 'unwind' or gerund 'relaxing'.

× It's also a really good win.

✓ It is also really wonderful.

The phrase 'really good win' is incorrect in this context. 'Win' is a noun implying victory; the student likely meant 'feeling' or 'experience' or simply 'wonderful.' Replaced with 'really wonderful' to convey the intended meaning.

× So when I listened, it's make me calm down and happy.

✓ So when I listen, it makes me calm and happy.

Tense and agreement errors: 'when I listened' (past) should be 'when I listen' for habitual action. 'it's make' is incorrect; third person singular requires 'it makes.' Also 'calm down and happy' mixes verb and adjective forms — use 'calm and happy.'