Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答が不自然な語順や語彙の誤用（例："rock out the window"、"best event"）があります。シンプルで直接的な主語文を最初に置き、補足を述べる際には接続詞（because、so、for example など）を使って論理的に繋げましょう。発音や一語の繰り返しを避け、語彙は具体的に（landscape, scenery, views など）使うと良いです。短めの文（最大5文）で明確に答えてください。

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car or bus. I especially enjoy the Syrian landscape because the scenery is very varied and beautiful. For example, I like watching mountains, old towns and farmland pass by. It helps me relax and feel connected to the place I'm visiting.

제안: 内容は分かりますが時制の一貫性（usually take / sometimes I took）や語の選び方を改善しましょう。理由を述べるときは because や so を使い、具体例や頻度を明確にすると良いです。また冗長な表現（"leave my memory as photos"）は避け、より自然な表現（"keep memories"）を使ってください。

예시: Yes, I usually take photos of the scenery outside the car window. As a video editor, I often capture interesting scenes to use as reference or to keep memories. For instance, I sometimes photograph unusual light or interesting buildings that I might use later in my projects.

제안: 理由は述べていますが、文法（"I live in nearby beach" → "I have lived near the beach"）と流暢さを改善しましょう。接続表現（because、since、so）を正しく使い、具体的な理由や比較（what you like about the sea vs mountains）を1〜2文で加えると説得力が増します。短く明確に答えてください。

예시: I prefer the sea. I have lived near the beach since I was born, so I grew up enjoying the ocean and coastal views. I find the sea calming and I like the sound of waves, whereas mountains feel more isolated to me.

× Yes, I love, I love rock out the window at the scenery.

✓ Yes, I love looking out the window at the scenery.

The original uses 'rock out' which is incorrect here; the correct verb pattern is 'love + verb-ing' (gerund) for activities you enjoy. Also remove the repeated 'I love'. Use 'looking out the window' to express observing the scenery. Grammar problem type's ID: 8

× Uh, actually the Syrian scenery is my best, best event.

✓ Actually, the Syrian scenery is my favorite.

'Best, best event' is unnatural and unclear. Use 'my favorite' or 'the most beautiful' to describe preference. This corrects sentence structure and word choice to fit English norms. Grammar problem type's ID: 26

× I work as a video editor and sometimes I took a photo because I want to leave my memory as photos.

✓ I work as a video editor and sometimes I take photos because I want to preserve my memories as photos.

Mixed tenses: 'work' is present simple, so 'took' (past) should be present 'take' to match habitual action. Also 'leave my memory as photos' is awkward; use 'preserve my memories as photos.' Ensure plural 'photos' matches context. Grammar problem type's ID: 5

× I prefer the sea because uh, I live in nearby beach since I was born so I love sea and Arab scenery.

✓ I prefer the sea because I have lived near the beach since I was born, so I love the sea and Arab scenery.

Use 'have lived' (present perfect) to express an action continuing from the past to present with 'since.' Use 'near the beach' rather than 'in nearby beach.' Include articles: 'the beach' and 'the sea.' Also add commas to separate clauses. Grammar problem type's ID: 6

× The sea.

✓ The sea.

Single-word response 'The sea.' is acceptable as an answer and requires the definite article 'the.' No change needed; keeping 'The sea.' is correct in context. Grammar problem type's ID: 22