Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and natural by using a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid repeating phrases (e.g. “I love”), correct small grammar issues (use “when I travel” not “whenever I go out for travel”), and keep it to under five sentences. Add a linking phrase if you describe reasons.

예시: Yes — I usually sit by the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the passing scenery. For example, I like spotting different landscapes and small towns, which helps me feel relaxed and curious about new places.

제안: Clarify and tighten your explanation. Use correct grammar for past memories (e.g. “it reminds me of memories” or “it reminds me of times I spent there”) and reduce redundancy. Use one linking word to connect reason and effect (e.g. “so” or “which”).

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the window because they remind me of the times I spent there with friends and family, so I can look back and cherish those memories.

제안: Answer directly with a clear preference, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct collocations (say “mountains” or “the mountains” and “forests” instead of “mountains forest”), and avoid vague phrases like “explore the nature.”

예시: I prefer the mountains. I enjoy hiking in forests because you can see a wide variety of plants and animals, and the air feels fresher, which makes outdoor walks more peaceful.

× Yes, I love to sit at the window seat whenever I go out for travel, either by bus or car, because I love to watch the views.

✓ Yes, I love to sit in the window seat whenever I travel by bus or car because I like to watch the view.

Original has awkward phrase 'sit at the window seat' (use 'sit in the window seat') and 'go out for travel' is unidiomatic (use 'travel' or 'go out' alone). 'Watch the views' is plural and less natural; 'watch the view' or 'look at the scenery' is better. Also avoid repeating 'I love' twice; changed second to 'I like' for variety. Suggestion: use common collocations ('sit in the window seat', 'travel by...', 'look at the scenery').

× I love to explore the new things.

✓ I love to explore new things.

Unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'new things' makes the phrase unnatural. Use 'explore new things' to express general interest. Suggestion: omit 'the' when referring to things in general.

× Yes, I prefer to take pictures from the window because it reminds me the memory which I spent over there, the things I which did over there with my friends or family.

✓ Yes, I prefer to take pictures from the window because they remind me of the memories I made there and the things I did with my friends or family.

Several errors: 'it reminds me the memory' should be 'they remind me of the memories' — use plural 'they' to match 'pictures' and preposition 'of'. 'which I spent over there' is incorrect; use 'the memories I made there'. 'the things I which did' misorders and misuses 'which'; use 'the things I did'. Suggestion: match pronouns with nouns, use correct prepositions ('remind me of'), and use natural verbs ('make memories').

× This helps me to cherish my memories.

✓ This helps me cherish my memories.

The infinitive marker 'to' after 'helps me' is optional; more natural is 'helps me cherish'. Both forms are grammatically acceptable, but omitting 'to' is more idiomatic. Suggestion: prefer 'helps me cherish' or 'helps me to remember'.

× Well actually I love to explore the nature rather than seas.

✓ Actually, I prefer exploring nature rather than the sea.

'Explore the nature' is incorrect; use 'explore nature' or 'exploring nature'. 'Rather than seas' is odd — use 'the sea' or 'the seaside' when contrasting with mountains. Also 'Well actually' is redundant; 'Actually' suffices. Suggestion: use 'prefer' to express preference and choose correct noun forms ('nature', 'the sea').

× I would highly recommend to go to the mountains forest to explore some different kinds of species over there.

✓ I would highly recommend going to the mountain forests to explore different kinds of species there.

'Recommend to go' is unidiomatic; use 'recommend going' or 'recommend that you go'. 'The mountains forest' mixes singular and plural and omits an article; use 'mountain forests' or 'the mountains' or 'a mountain forest'. 'Some different kinds of species' is wordy; 'different kinds of species' or 'various species' is better. 'Over there' is unnecessary; 'there' is sufficient. Suggestion: use correct verb patterns after 'recommend', correct noun forms and articles, and concise phrasing.