Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and natural: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar and word choice: use ‘watch the scenery’ or ‘look outside’ instead of ‘living outside’ and ‘trifling’. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

예시: Not really. I usually prefer to watch movies on my phone when I travel because it helps me relax and makes long journeys pass faster. Sometimes, though, I glance out of the window if the view is interesting, for example when passing through countryside or by the coast.

제안: Answer directly, then give specific conditions when you do take photos. Use linking words like ‘but’ or ‘however’ and avoid repetition. Correct collocations: say ‘take many pictures’ or ‘few pictures’, and use clear reasons for posting on social media. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Not often. However, when I see a really beautiful scene—such as wide open fields, dramatic clouds, or a colourful sunset—I’ll take a few photos. I usually post the best ones on my social media to share the view with friends.

제안: Begin with a clear preference statement. Then give specific reasons with linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’. Correct grammar and natural expressions: say ‘I prefer the mountains’ and explain why (e.g., scenery, peace, dramatic sunrises). Keep sentences short and clear (max 3–4 sentences).

예시: I prefer the mountains because I find them more attractive and peaceful. For example, I love the dramatic effect of the sun rising or setting behind the peaks, and I enjoy hiking and the fresh, quiet atmosphere there.

× During travelling, I don't prefer as much living outside.

✓ When travelling, I don't prefer looking outside as much.

The sentence uses incorrect verb choice and word order for present tense. 'During travelling' is unnatural; use 'When travelling'. 'Prefer' normally takes a gerund or infinitive; 'prefer looking outside' is correct. Place 'as much' after the verb phrase. Suggestion: use natural time phrase and correct word order for present tense preferences.

× During trifling, I often download movies in my phone and watch them during the travel.

✓ When I have free time, I often download movies on my phone and watch them during travel.

The phrase 'During trifling' is incorrect and unclear; replace with 'When I have free time'. Use the preposition 'on' with 'phone' ('on my phone') and omit the article before 'travel' or use 'the travel' depending on context; 'during travel' is natural. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× I usually do not take as much pictures but then I see a beautiful scenery and a landscape, landscape and open field and clouds.

✓ I usually don't take many pictures, but sometimes I see beautiful scenery, landscapes, open fields, and clouds.

'As much pictures' is incorrect; 'many' is the correct quantifier for countable plural 'pictures'. 'Scenery' is an uncountable noun so drop 'a' and use plural 'landscapes' for multiple views. Use commas to separate items. Use 'sometimes' rather than 'then' for occasional actions.

× I take pictures and post it on my social media and share with my friends and guarantee.

✓ I take pictures, post them on my social media, share them with my friends, and sometimes add a caption.

Pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'pictures' (plural); use 'them'. 'Guarantee' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'caption' or 'comment' or 'tag'. Use consistent verb forms for parallel actions and add a plausible final phrase. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× I prefer to look mountains as because for me it's look more attractive and behind the mountains look at looking the sun is low dramatic.

✓ I prefer looking at mountains because, to me, they look more attractive, and the sun setting behind the mountains looks very dramatic.

Multiple preposition and structure errors: use 'looking at mountains' not 'look mountains'. Remove extra words like 'as because'. Use 'to me' for opinion. 'It's look' is ungrammatical; use 'they look' (agree with plural 'mountains'). 'Behind the mountains' is fine but restructure 'the sun setting behind the mountains' for clarity. Use 'very dramatic' rather than 'low dramatic'.