Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答比较自然但语法和表达不够准确，句子重复且有语法错误。建议：① 开头用一到两句直接回应问题（主题句），如“Yes, I often look out...”。② 用一到两句具体描述原因或感受，注意时态一致和连贯连接词（e.g. because, when, so）。③ 避免冗余和重复，更换词汇（e.g. scenery, cityscape, view）并控制在最多5句。练习时可先写出要点再口述。

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching how the scenery changes. For example, when I sit still and other vehicles pass, the cityscape seems to fly by, which feels exciting and dynamic.

제안: 内容明确但表达重复且有语法和逻辑问题。建议：① 直接回答（No, I don't）并用2-3个简洁原因支持。② 使用恰当词汇（e.g. blur, reflections, other vehicles）并用连接词（for example, because）使条理清晰。③ 注意避免重复词如“very difficult”连续出现，可用不同短语替换。

예시: No, I don't often take photos from a moving car because the images usually come out blurry. Also, reflections on the window and passing vehicles make it hard to get a clear shot.

제안: 回答结构较好，观点明确且给出多项理由，但语言可更精炼和自然。建议：① 开始用一句明确的主题句（I prefer the sea because...）。② 将理由用连接词串联（for one, moreover, also），并尽量用更地道短语（e.g. I'm not very fit → I don't enjoy strenuous hikes）。③ 可加入一两个具体例子或对比使内容更生动。

예시: I prefer the sea because I don't enjoy strenuous hikes, so mountains feel too tiring to me. Moreover, I love the sea view, the fresh breeze, and the sound of waves, which I find very relaxing.

× Absolutely, because seeing out from bus or car, doing travelling can see the total, the scenery that is totally different.

✓ Absolutely, because seeing out from a bus or car while travelling lets me see the whole scenery, which is totally different.

句中动名词和非谓语结构使用不当；应使用介词短语“seeing out from a bus or car while travelling”或更自然的“seeing out of a bus or car while travelling”，并用主句谓语“lets me see”来表达结果。同时加入不定冠词“a”使名词短语完整。建议把“doing travelling can see the total”改为更自然的从句或短语，如“while travelling lets me see the whole scenery”。

× When I was I am stationary, the vehicles passing by and the cityscapes moving very fast.

✓ When I am stationary, the vehicles passing by and the cityscapes move very fast.

原句混用了过去时和现在时（"was I am"），时态不一致。根据语境描述习惯性事实，应使用一般现在时。将句子改为“When I am stationary, ... move very fast”。

× It's thrilling and exciting to me.

✓ It’s thrilling and exciting for me.

介词选择错误，英语中常用“thrilling/exciting for someone”来表达对某人的感受，使用“to me”虽非完全错误但“for me”更自然。将“to me”改为“for me”。

× I don't take photos outside the car window very often.

✓ I don’t often take photos out of the car window.

原句语序可以更自然地调整：将频率副词“often”置于助动词之后、主语之前或在谓语动词前更符合习惯表达。并将“outside the car window”改为更常用的“out of the car window”。

× First, the moving car would make the focusing of photo photo very difficult.

✓ First, the moving car makes focusing the photo very difficult.

重复单词“photo photo”应删除；“the focusing of photo”结构生硬，应用动名词短语“focusing the photo”。此外语气应与事实陈述一致，用一般现在时“makes”。

× Second, they are moving vehicles and passing passengers will make taking photos very difficult.

✓ Second, moving vehicles and passing passengers make taking photos very difficult.

句首的代词“they”指代不清，可直接省略，且时态用一般现在时表示普遍事实。将“will make”改为“make”更自然。

× Third, the reflection of wind.

✓ Third, there are reflections on the window from the wind and light that make photos unclear.

原句不完整，缺少谓语，属于无谓语的句子结构错误。需要补充谓语并说明反光如何影响拍照，构成完整句子。

× I would definitely choose the sea.

✓ I would definitely choose the sea.

该句本身语法正确，但“would”表达假设或礼貌。根据对话语境（偏好），使用“would”可接受，也可改为一般现在时“I definitely choose the sea”或更自然的“I would definitely choose the sea”。此处无需修改。

× First, I'm not very fit.

✓ First, I’m not very fit.

此句语法正确，时态与语境一致，无需修改。

× To climb onto the top of a mountain would be very exhausting to me.

✓ Climbing to the top of a mountain would be very exhausting for me.

使用不定式“To climb”虽可，但更自然用动名词“Climbing”来表达一般情况；“onto the top of”冗余，改为“to the top of”。将“to me”改为更自然的“for me”。

× Second, the landscape of sea and the skyline is very spectacular to me.

✓ Second, the sea landscape and the skyline are very spectacular to me.

主语“landscape of sea and the skyline”结构不自然且主谓不一致，应改为“sea landscape and the skyline”并使用复数动词“are”。“to me”可保留表示个人感受。

× I also love the breeze, the splash of the sea and the animals around.

✓ I also love the breeze, the splashing of the sea and the animals around.

“the splash of the sea”作为名词短语不太自然，改为动名词“the splashing of the sea”或“the waves”更贴切。介词“around”可以接受，但可更明确为“around me”或“nearby”。