Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more grammatical, concise and slightly more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g. "scenery" and "sceneries").

예시: Yes — I often look out the window when I travel by bus or train. I find it relaxing, and I especially enjoy seeing rural villages and changing landscapes because they feel very different from city life.

제안: This answer is mostly natural and clear. Improve by adding a linking phrase and a brief specific example or result to enrich content. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and correct small phrasing for fluency.

예시: Yes — I do, since I'm an amateur photographer. However, because the car moves quickly, it's hard to get sharp photos, so I usually wait for stops or use burst mode to increase my chances of a good shot.

제안: Make the response grammatically correct and more concise. Begin with the preference, then give 2 specific supporting reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. "in the mountains" repeated) and finish the sentence cleanly.

예시: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy their silhouettes at sunset and the peaceful atmosphere. Also, the fresh air and birdsong help me relax, so I often choose mountain trips to unwind.

× As a city person I enjoy watch out the window when I am in the transportation like bus or train because it makes me relaxed and also I can enjoy the scenery of some villages and rural sceneries.

✓ As a city person, I enjoy looking out of the window when I am on transportation like a bus or train because it relaxes me and I can enjoy the scenery of villages and rural areas.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (verb + -ing), so 'watch' should be 'looking'. Use the preposition 'out of' with 'window' and 'on' with modes of transport. 'In the transportation' is unidiomatic; use 'on a bus or train'. 'Makes me relaxed' is better as 'relaxes me'. 'Sceneries' is incorrect plural; use 'scenery' or 'rural areas'. Suggestions: use gerunds after 'enjoy', choose correct prepositions for transport and windows, and use uncountable 'scenery' or 'rural areas.'

× Yes, as an amateur photographer, I think the view of the scenery outside the car window is sometimes gorgeous, but it's also difficult to capture the moment because the car is driving too fast.

✓ Yes, as an amateur photographer, I think the scenery outside the car window is sometimes gorgeous, but it's also difficult to capture because the car is moving too fast.

'The view of the scenery' is wordy; 'the scenery' is sufficient. 'Capture the moment' is okay but 'capture' alone is more natural here. 'Driving too fast' is better as 'moving too fast' when referring to a car in general description. Also omit unnecessary articles. Suggestions: simplify noun phrases and use 'moving' for general motion description.

× I prefer Mountain View because I enjoy watching the sunsets and the silhouette of mountain shape and it makes me feel relaxed especially in the mountains.

✓ I prefer mountain views because I enjoy watching the sunsets and the silhouettes of the mountains; they make me feel relaxed, especially in the mountains.

'Mountain View' as a proper noun is unclear; use plural 'mountain views' or 'the mountains'. 'Silhouette of mountain shape' is ungrammatical; use 'silhouettes of the mountains' or 'mountain silhouettes'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it makes me' should match plural subject, so use 'they make me.' Suggestions: use plural forms for general preferences and match verb number to subject.

× I can feel the fresh air and also hear the bird chirping in the mountains and.

✓ I can feel the fresh air and also hear birds chirping in the mountains.

Ending 'and.' is incomplete and should be removed. 'The bird chirping' is too specific; use plural 'birds chirping' for general statement. 'Hear birds chirping in the mountains' is the natural word order. Suggestions: avoid trailing conjunctions, use plural when referring generally to animals, and place 'in the mountains' at the end for clarity.