Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and organized: start with a clear topic sentence in the present simple (for habitual actions), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms. Also correct vocabulary errors (e.g. “spot” not “sport”) and ensure sentence length stays under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching natural scenery. For example, I often spot interesting places I might visit later, and watching the view relaxes me and gives my eyes a break from my phone.

제안: Use correct verb forms and more precise linking words. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give specific details about frequency, purpose, or what you photograph. Reduce redundancy and correct collocations (e.g. “take photos” not “love to capturing”, “receive feedback” not “give feedback from them”).

예시: Yes, I often take photos of landscapes from the car window because I like capturing interesting views. I usually post the best pictures on social media to share the experience, and I keep several photos as souvenirs of the trip.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then provide two specific, well-linked reasons. Correct grammar (use gerunds/infinitives properly) and collocations (‘quieter than the beach’, ‘I enjoy hiking’). Avoid fragmented or unclear sentences and keep it within five sentences.

예시: I definitely prefer the mountains because they are much quieter than the beach and feel more peaceful. I enjoy hiking and watching sunrises or sunsets from ridges, which helps me relax and feel more mindful in nature.

× I look out the window when I was travelling any bus or car because I really love to see natural scenes, especially when it was a new thing for me.

✓ I looked out the window when I was travelling by bus or car because I really loved seeing natural scenes, especially when they were new to me.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The context refers to past travel ('was travelling'), so main verb should be past ('looked') and attitudes at that time should be past ('loved'). Also 'any bus or car' is incorrect preposition/word choice; use 'by bus or car'. Use 'seeing' (gerund) after 'love' when describing enjoyment. Replace 'it was a new thing for me' with 'they were new to me' to refer to 'natural scenes' plural and improve clarity.

× I sport out the interesting place which I would like to come out in the future.

✓ I spot interesting places that I would like to visit in the future.

The original has wrong word choice 'sport' instead of 'spot' and awkward quantifier and article use. 'Place' should be plural 'places' if referring generally. Use 'that' for defining relative clause and 'visit' instead of 'come out' to express future intention. This corrects vocabulary and quantifier agreement.

× It it give me relaxation and my eyes break from the phone.

✓ It gives me relaxation and gives my eyes a break from the phone.

The subject 'it' requires singular present tense verb 'gives' (subject-verb agreement). The phrase 'my eyes break from the phone' is unnatural; use 'gives my eyes a break from the phone' to show relief. Also remove duplicated 'it'.

× Yes, I love to capturing natural landscape from the car window.

✓ Yes, I love capturing natural landscapes from the car window.

After 'love' use the gerund 'capturing' not the infinitive 'to capturing'. 'Landscape' should be plural when speaking generally. So use 'I love capturing natural landscapes'. This corrects verb form and noun number.

× I enjoy sharing this photo on social media with my friends and always give feedback from them.

✓ I enjoy sharing these photos on social media with my friends and always get feedback from them.

'This photo' should be plural 'these photos' to match general habit. Use 'get feedback from them' rather than 'give feedback from them'—the student receives feedback. 'On social media' is correct preposition; only verb choice and plurality needed.

× I like to keep this picture to remember the trip.

✓ I like to keep these pictures to remember the trip.

If referring to photos taken during trips, plural 'these pictures' is more appropriate. Alternatively, 'keep this picture to remember the trip' could be acceptable for a single photo, but context implies multiple photos, so change quantifier accordingly.

× I definitely prefer the mountains because it is much quieter than beach.

✓ I definitely prefer the mountains because they are much quieter than the beach.

Compare plural 'the mountains' with 'the beach' (singular) or both plural; here use 'they are' for 'mountains' (plural) and include the definite article 'the' before 'beach'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'they are' not 'it is'. Also include 'the' before 'beach'.

× I love to seeing sunset or sunrise from the top of the mountain.

✓ I love seeing the sunset or sunrise from the top of the mountain.

After 'love' use the gerund 'seeing' rather than the infinitive 'to seeing'. Also include 'the' before 'sunset' and 'sunrise' for natural events and keep article 'the' before 'mountain' if referring to a specific mountain; otherwise use 'a mountain'. This fixes verb form and article use.

× I love to hiking and explore nature.

✓ I love hiking and exploring nature.

When listing activities after 'love', use gerunds consistently: 'hiking' and 'exploring'. The original mixed an infinitive ('to hiking' incorrect) and base verb 'explore'. Use parallel gerund forms for grammatical correctness.

× Try lush green meadows and natural landscape if it gives me relaxation and mindfulness.

✓ I try to visit lush green meadows and natural landscapes because they give me relaxation and mindfulness.

The original lacks a clear subject and has awkward imperative 'Try' that doesn't fit context. Change to first person present habit 'I try to visit' and use plural 'landscapes'. Use 'because they give me' to explain reason with correct subject-verb agreement. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.