Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子較長且有語法與用詞小錯誤，表達有點重複。建議用一個明確的主題句開頭，然後用一到兩句具體細節支持；注意動詞時態與冠詞（the car → cars / the pictures），避免冗詞，提高流暢度。可練習將複句分成短句並使用連接詞如 "because", "so" 來連貫。

예시: I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car, especially if the place is new to me. I do this because it helps me relax and makes the journey feel shorter. Sometimes I take photos to remember the sights and look at them later.

제안: 回答有明確肯定，但存在語法錯誤與冗長（如 "in my mind" 用法不當，時態與詞序問題）。建議先給出直接回答，接著用一兩個具體原因或習慣作補充，並用連接詞（"because", "and then"）讓語句更自然。注意簡潔與正確的搭配（post pictures on social media）。

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because I want to remember the views. After the trip I usually post the best pictures on social media so my friends can see them.

제안: 回答結構不錯，有理由和例子，但有幾處用詞與句子結構需改進（例如 "I want to brave the fresh air" 用法不自然）。建議開頭直接表態，再用清晰的原因和一個具體例子，避免不必要的短語。可用更自然的片語如 "breathe the fresh air"。

예시: I prefer the mountains because I live by the sea so coastal views are familiar to me. Mountains offer fresh air and peaceful scenery, which help me relax. For example, a weekend in the hills lets me breathe fresh air and recharge my energy.

× I often look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or the car especially the place is new for me.

✓ I often look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or by car, especially when the place is new to me.

句中“the car”在并列时不需要定冠词，且短语“especially the place is new for me”结构不自然。将“the car”改为“by car”与“by bus”并列；把“especially”后的从句改为“especially when the place is new to me”，使句子流畅并符合英语习惯。

× It helped me relax and pass the time.

✓ It helps me relax and pass the time.

此处描述的是经常性的行为，应使用一般现在时而不是过去时。将“helped”改为“helps”以与前文的现在时态（I often look）保持一致。

× And occasionally I will take up my phone to take the picture.

✓ And occasionally I take out my phone to take pictures.

“take up my phone”用法不自然，常用表达是“take out my phone”。另外“the picture”应改为复数“pictures”或不定冠词，因为通常拍多张或泛指照片。时态上使用一般现在时更合适以表示习惯性动作。

× I want to capture the beautiful sceneries and when I see the picture, you bring me back to that.

✓ I want to capture the beautiful scenery, and when I see the pictures, they bring me back to that moment.

“sceneries”通常用不可数名词“scenery”；“when I see the picture, you bring me back to that”中的“you”指代不清且不合适，应该用复数代词“they”指代“pictures”。同时补全“that”中的名词“moment”更清晰。

× Yes, I absolutely like taking photos of the scenery outside the car window and especially I want to capture the beautiful views in my mind and after that I like post the pictures in the social media and if these are really important.

✓ Yes, I absolutely like taking photos of the scenery outside the car window. I especially want to capture the beautiful views in my mind, and afterwards I like to post the pictures on social media if they are really important.

句子过长且动词形式不一致。“after that I like post”缺少不定式标记“to”；“in the social media”介词应为“on social media”；“these”指代不清，应改为“they”。拆分为两句并调整动词形式和介词使句子通顺。

× I prefer the mountains because I live near the coast, so sea views are quite familiar to me.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I live near the coast, so sea views are quite familiar to me.

该句语法正确，无需修改。保留原句。

× I enjoy visiting the mountains for their stunning scenery and the chance to relax in nature.

✓ I enjoy visiting the mountains for their stunning scenery and the chance to relax in nature.

该句语法正确，“enjoy”后接动名词“visiting”使用得当，无需修改。

× For example, I want to brave the fresh air, it really helps me to recharge my batteries.

✓ For example, I want to breathe the fresh air; it really helps me recharge my batteries.

原句中的“brave the fresh air”用词错误，正确动词应为“breathe”。此外原句为两个独立分句，应使用分号或句号分开。去掉“to”前的“helps me to”中的“to”可使语气更自然，但保留也不错误。