Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and natural by using one clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid repetition like "I watch... I love to watch a lot."

예시: Yes, I always look out of the window because it helps me relax. For example, when I travel by bus I enjoy watching changing shops and parks, which makes the journey feel shorter.

제안: Keep the response focused and natural: start with a direct answer, then give a specific reason and a brief future reference. Use a linking word like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and avoid overly long clauses.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery because they are lovely keepsakes. For instance, I plan to show these pictures to my children one day so they can see how I spent my childhood.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence, then one specific supporting detail. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., "enjoy to do" → "enjoy"), and finish the sentence logically ("live near" needs an object, e.g., "live nearby").

예시: I prefer the sea because I enjoy fishing in my free time, especially rock fishing. If I had the choice, I would live near the coast so I could fish more often.

× Yes I do because it just relaxes my mind every time.

✓ Yes, I do because it just relaxes my mind every time.

Missing comma after introductory 'Yes' is punctuation, but relates to sentence clarity rather than listed types; however present tense 'relaxes' is correct for 'it' (the scenery). Add comma for clarity: 'Yes, I do because it just relaxes my mind every time.' Suggestion: include commas after introductory words to improve readability.

× I watch the surroundings when I'm either going in the bus or car and I love to watch a lot.

✓ I watch the surroundings when I'm either going on the bus or in the car, and I love watching them a lot.

Preposition 'in the bus' is less natural than 'on the bus'; use 'in the car' is fine. Also parallel structure and verb form: 'love to watch a lot' is awkward. Change to 'love watching them a lot' for natural English. 'Either' with two alternatives pairs with 'or' and both should have appropriate prepositions.

× Of course I do, because I could always keep these photos as memories and I can even show my children one day and tell them that this is what I used to do during my childhood.

✓ Of course I do, because I can always keep these photos as memories and I can even show them to my children one day and tell them that this is what I used to do during my childhood.

Use of 'could' here is unnecessary and weakens certainty; 'can' expresses ability in present/future contexts. Also word order: 'show my children' is acceptable but idiomatic is 'show them to my children'. The past habit 'used to do during my childhood' is fine.

× I prefer the sea because I am someone who enjoys to do a lot of fishing during my free time, especially rock fishing.

✓ I prefer the sea because I am someone who enjoys doing a lot of fishing during my free time, especially rock fishing.

Verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund, not an infinitive. Change 'enjoys to do' to 'enjoys doing'.

× Therefore, if I ever get a chance to live, I would always live near.

✓ Therefore, if I ever get a chance to live there, I would always live nearby.

Sentence missing object/place after 'near'. Add 'there' or 'nearby' to indicate location. Also conditional consistency: 'if I ever get a chance' (present) pairs with 'I would' (conditional); better to use 'I will' or change 'get' to 'got'. However many speakers use this mixed form; to be strictly consistent use 'I would always live there if I ever got the chance.' Suggested correction uses 'would' with implied hypothetical and improves clarity by adding location 'there' or 'nearby'.