Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答不够清晰和连贯，句子结构有错误且信息不足。建议：1) 直接回答问题（例如：Yes, I do 或 No, I don't）。2) 使用一到两句具体理由或细节来支撑观点（例如说明你为什么选择靠窗位置、观察风景带来的感受）。3) 使用连接词（for example, because, so）使句子更连贯。4) 注意语法，使用正确的时态和代词。

예시: Yes, I do. I always choose a window seat when I travel because I enjoy watching different landscapes go by. For example, seeing countryside fields and old villages helps me relax and makes the journey more interesting.

제안: 回答表明你拍照，但表达重复且有语法错误，信息泛泛。建议：1) 简洁直接地回答并给出具体理由（例如记录回忆、分享给朋友）。2) 避免无意义的填充词（如 MMM），控制答案长度在3到4句内。3) 提供一个具体例子说明你何时拍照或拍什么类型的景色。

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car. I do this because capturing beautiful views makes me happy and helps me remember the trip. For instance, I usually photograph sunsets or interesting buildings to share with my family later.

제안: 你的答案表达了喜好和理由，但措辞有些生硬和不自然，部分词汇使用不当。建议：1) 直接用完整自然的句子开头（I prefer the sea.）2) 用更自然的表达描述感受（e.g. it makes me feel calm/relaxed），并用连接词扩展理由。3) 避免抽象或不常用的表达（如 'symbol of true and quiet'），改为具体感受或例子。

예시: I prefer the sea because it makes me feel calm and relaxed. I love the colour blue and the sound of the waves helps me forget my worries. For example, sitting on the beach and watching the horizon always soothes me.

× Well, actually I will choose do this because when I travel in in other regions and I will choose these seats because.

✓ Well, actually I would choose to do this because when I travel in other regions I choose these seats.

原句中多处时态和结构不自然： 1) “will choose do this” 用法错误，动词 choose 后应接不定式 to do 或直接 choose + 名词，且在描述习惯或偏好时用一般现在时或表达假设时用 would 更合适。建议改为 “would choose to do” 或 “choose to do”。 2) 重复的介词 “in in” 是笔误，应删除一个。 3) 后半句中 “I will choose these seats” 描述习惯时应用一般现在时 “I choose these seats” 或表达偏好用 “I would choose these seats”。 改进建议：说偏好或习惯时多用一般现在时；表达假设或礼貌时用 would；注意不定式结构和去掉重复单词。

× Yes, sure. MMM, because I believe that take some photos can make me happy and comfortable.

✓ Yes, sure. Mm, because I believe that taking some photos can make me happy and comfortable.

原句中 “believe that take some photos” 中动词形式错误。动词在 that 从句中作主语或宾语时，表示动作通常用动名词（taking）或使用完整从句结构（that taking... 或 that taking photos can...）。因此应将 take 改为 taking。改进建议：遇到动词作为名词化用法或动作整体作为主语时，使用动名词形式。

× And I believe take photos This action is vital in my daily life.

✓ And I believe taking photos is vital in my daily life.

原句语序混乱且标点错误： 1) “I believe take photos This action” 语法不连贯，缺少连接词并且动词形式错误，应将两个部分合并为一个完整句子。 2) 使用动名词 taking 来作主语。 改进建议：保持句子连贯，使用恰当的连词或把句子合并为一完整从句，避免断裂。

× And I will choose the sea because the ocean can give my peaceful feeling and because I love the blue.

✓ And I would choose the sea because the ocean can give me a peaceful feeling and because I love blue.

原句问题： 1) “give my peaceful feeling” 中代词和名词顺序错误，应为 “give me a peaceful feeling” 或 “give me peace”。 2) “I love the blue” 在一般表颜色喜好时通常不加定冠词 the，直接说 “I love blue”。 3) 时态/语气方面，描述偏好用 would 或一般现在时都可，改为 would 更礼貌。 改进建议：注意人称代词作宾语用 me；表示颜色作为抽象喜好时不用定冠词。

× This color is a symbol of true and quiet.

✓ This color is a symbol of truth and tranquility.

原句中 “a symbol of true and quiet” 使用了错误的词类： 1) true 和 quiet 是形容词，名词短语需要名词形式，应该用 truth（真实）和 tranquility（宁静）。 2) 另外搭配更自然的是 “a symbol of truth and tranquility” 或 “a symbol of peace and quiet”。 改进建议：注意并列概念时使用相同词类（都用名词或形容词短语），并选择常用搭配。