Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on producing a clear, short topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two coherent supporting details. Use correct verbs and simple sentence structure, avoid unrelated or confusing statements (for example "My mum always die" is unclear and inappropriate). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas. Aim for correct vocabulary: use "commute" instead of "commune" and "beautiful scenery" instead of "beautiful" alone.

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car because I enjoy the scenery. For example, I like watching trees and houses pass by, and it helps me relax during the trip.

제안: Give a direct answer and then give a clear, specific reason. Use correct grammar for negatives and gerunds: "I don't like taking photos." Explain the reason concisely and accurately (for example: "because the view is blurred from a moving car" or "because I prefer to enjoy the moment"). Avoid unclear phrases such as "it's don't necessarily with my memory card."

예시: No, I don't usually take photos from the car because the images are often blurred when the vehicle is moving. I prefer to enjoy the view with my eyes rather than take pictures.

제안: Start with a clear preference sentence: "I prefer the sea" or "I prefer the mountains." Then give specific reasons and link them with words like "because" or "so." Use correct comparative and noun forms ("more beautiful than the mountains"). Avoid vague phrases; be specific about what you like about the sea (sounds, colors, activities).

예시: I prefer the sea because I find it more beautiful than the mountains. I especially like the wide blue sky and the sound of the waves, which make me feel relaxed.

× Yes I do, I do to see outside a window when I commune with car but I'm not driving by myself.

✓ Yes, I do. I like to look out of the window when I travel by car, but I am not driving myself.

Original errors: incorrect verb constructions ('do to see' should be 'like to look'), wrong verb 'commune' for 'travel', missing preposition 'out of', and awkward reflexive phrase 'by myself'. Suggestion: use 'like to look out of the window' and 'travel by car' and 'I am not driving' or 'I am not driving myself' to be natural and grammatically correct. Grammar issues matched: present participle usage (looking) and verb choice; the correction uses the infinitive 'to look' and correct verbs to fit the context.

× My mum always die.

✓ My mum is always worried.

Original sentence uses the verb 'die' incorrectly and in present tense in a way that does not make sense. The student likely meant 'my mum always worries' or 'is always worried'. Suggestion: replace with 'My mum is always worried' or 'My mum always worries' depending on intended meaning. This fixes verb meaning and tense.

× And yes I love to see the outside with beautiful.

✓ And yes, I love to enjoy the beautiful view outside.

Original mixes 'outside' and 'beautiful' incorrectly. 'Beautiful' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify (e.g., 'beautiful view'). Suggestion: use 'beautiful view outside' or 'the outside scenery is beautiful' to make a correct adjective-noun structure.

× No I don't. I just love to see the outside but I don't like to taking the photo because it's don't necessarily with my memory card.

✓ No, I don't. I just like to look at the outside, but I don't like taking photos because they are not necessarily saved on my memory card.

Multiple issues: 'don't like to taking' mixes infinitive and -ing; correct is 'don't like taking' or 'don't like to take'. 'It's don't necessarily with my memory card' is ungrammatical: use plural 'they are not necessarily saved on my memory card' or 'it may not be saved on my memory card' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use 'like to look at' or 'like to look out' and 'don't like taking photos' and 'they are not necessarily saved' for correct agreement and verb forms.

× I love see because I think is more beautiful than mountain.

✓ I love the sea because I think it is more beautiful than the mountains.

Errors: missing article 'the' before 'sea' (if referring to a specific preference), missing verb 'to' in 'love to see' or should be 'I love the sea', missing subject 'it' before 'is', and 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains' after 'than'. Suggestion: use 'I love the sea because I think it is more beautiful than the mountains.'

× Additionally, I love to see the sky color and also blue color more than green color.

✓ Additionally, I love the color of the sky, and I prefer blue to green.

Original repeats 'color' awkwardly and uses 'see the sky color' which is unidiomatic; better: 'the color of the sky'. Comparison 'blue color more than green color' should be 'prefer blue to green' or 'like blue more than green'. Suggestion: use concise comparative structure: 'I prefer blue to green' and 'the color of the sky' for correct preposition and noun usage.