Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on giving a clear, relevant direct answer first, then add one or two concise supporting details. Avoid unrelated or invented technical phrases. Use simple linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') and keep your response to no more than five sentences. Also correct small grammar: say 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' and 'when travelling by car or bus.'

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because I enjoy seeing the passing scenery. For example, I like watching buildings, parks and people because it helps me relax and notice local life.

제안: Answer directly with a short topic sentence (Yes/No) and provide a specific reason or example. Avoid long unrelated sentences. Mention frequency and what you photograph. Use linking words like 'because' or 'sometimes' to connect ideas.

예시: Sometimes I take photos of the scenery from the car window because I want to remember interesting places. For instance, I often photograph colourful buildings or mountain views when the light is good.

제안: Give a clear preference in the first sentence and then support it with specific reasons and an example. Avoid irrelevant or nonsensical phrases. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' to make your response coherent. Keep answers concise and natural sounding.

예시: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. For example, I like walking on the sand, watching marine life, and listening to the waves, which helps me unwind.

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✓ This sentence is ungrammatical and irrelevant to the question; a corrected, relevant response: 'No, that sentence does not make sense in this context; I look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car.'

The original sentence is incoherent and does not answer the examiner's question. This is a sentence structure error (type 26). The content appears to be technical phrases strung together without subject-verb coherence or appropriate context. Suggestion: keep answers relevant, use a clear subject and verb, and form simple declarative sentences that directly answer the question (e.g., 'Yes, I look out the window when I travel by bus or car').

× So we should definitely look at the window outside the scenery while travelling out by the car or the bus.

✓ We should definitely look out of the window at the scenery when travelling by car or by bus.

The errors include incorrect preposition use and word order (type 11). 'Look at the window' implies looking at the window itself; 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' means looking at scenery outside. 'Travelling out by the car' is incorrect: use 'travelling by car' or 'by bus'. Remove the definite article before modes of transport. Suggestion: use 'look out (of) the window' and 'travel by car/bus'.

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✓ That sentence is irrelevant and unclear; a corrected relevant answer: 'Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery through the car window.'

Original sentence is incoherent and unrelated to the examiner's question, a sentence structure error (type 26). It lacks clarity and does not form a meaningful response. Suggestion: answer directly and simply, using subject + verb + object to state the habit (e.g., 'I sometimes take photos of the scenery through the car window').

× So we usually take the photos outside the scenery from the car window.

✓ We usually take photos of the scenery through the car window.

This sentence misuses prepositions (type 11). 'Take the photos outside the scenery from the car window' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'take photos of the scenery' and 'through the car window' or 'from the car window'. Also omit the definite article before 'photos' when speaking generally. Suggestion: use 'take photos of' + object and prefer 'through/from the car window'.

× Yes, I definitely prefer the sea life because the sea life is good, it contains the marine life, and also there is sand in which we can play.

✓ Yes, I definitely prefer the sea because it has marine life and sandy beaches where we can play.

Problems include repetitive and awkward noun phrasing and pronoun use (type 12) and wordiness. 'Sea life' is redundant with 'marine life' and 'there is sand in which we can play' is formal and awkward. Use 'it' to refer to 'the sea' and concise nouns like 'sandy beaches'. Suggestion: use pronouns to avoid repetition and choose natural collocations: 'the sea', 'marine life', 'sandy beaches'.

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✓ That sentence is irrelevant and unclear; a corrected relevant answer: 'We usually prefer the sea so that we can enjoy the scenery and beach activities there.'

Original sentence is incoherent and unrelated to the question, a sentence structure error (type 26). It fails to convey a clear meaning and uses technical fragments incorrectly. Suggestion: keep answers directly related to preference questions and use clear clauses explaining reasons (e.g., 'We prefer the sea because we can enjoy the scenery and beach activities').

× So we usually prefer to the sea so that we can enjoy the movement over there.

✓ So we usually prefer the sea so that we can enjoy the atmosphere and activities there.

This sentence has incorrect preposition use and word choice (type 11). 'Prefer to the sea' is wrong; the correct structure is 'prefer the sea' or 'prefer the sea to the mountains'. 'Enjoy the movement' is unclear — likely meant 'enjoy the atmosphere' or 'enjoy activities'. Suggestion: use 'prefer X to Y' when comparing, or simply 'prefer X', and choose appropriate nouns to describe what you enjoy (e.g., 'scenery', 'atmosphere', 'activities').