Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases (e.g., "recommend to lookout"). Use correct verb forms and simple vocabulary accurately.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing new places. For example, I like watching changing landscapes and small villages pass by, which helps me relax during long journeys.

제안: Give one clear reason and a brief example. Use correct grammar (e.g., "I take photos because photos create memories") and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because photos help me remember interesting places. For example, last month I photographed an old bridge and later showed the pictures to my family, which reminded us of that trip.

제안: Answer directly with a clear preference and give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because" and "and"). Correct subject-verb agreement ("mountains make" not "makes") and avoid repeating the same idea. Add a short personal example or comparison to strengthen the response.

예시: I prefer the mountains because they energize me and I enjoy the green scenery. For instance, hiking in the mountains gives me fresh air and beautiful views, whereas the sea can feel crowded and noisy.

× Yes, I always recommend to lookout, lookout, the lookout, the window at the scenery when I'm travelling by bus or car, bus and car, because I am I am the I'm that kind of person who was crawling new things.

✓ Yes, I always look out the window at the scenery when I'm traveling by bus or car because I am the kind of person who enjoys discovering new things.

Multiple issues: incorrect verb choice 'recommend to lookout' and repetition; 'look out' is the correct phrasal verb and does not take 'recommend'; 'the lookout' is wrong; 'travelling' -> 'traveling' (American spelling acceptable but keep consistent) and 'was crawling new things' is ungrammatical—intended meaning is 'enjoys discovering new things'. Suggest using clear subject-verb structure and the phrasal verb 'look out' followed by the object 'the window'. Maintain tense present continuous for 'I'm traveling' and present simple for habitual action 'I always look out'.

× Whenever I travel through bus and car, I I came into new things.

✓ Whenever I travel by bus or car, I come across new things.

Preposition and verb errors: use 'by bus or car' not 'through bus and car'; 'came into new things' is wrong—use 'come across' to mean encounter; maintain present simple 'come' for habitual actions. Remove duplicate 'I'.

× Yes, I always take scenery outside the car window because I am that kind of person that capture all movements because because according to me photos make photos makes memories and person more enthusiasm.

✓ Yes, I always take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I am the kind of person who captures movement; in my opinion photos create memories and make a person more enthusiastic.

Multiple issues aligned to verb forms and agreement: 'take scenery' should be 'take photos of the scenery' (noun use); 'that capture' should be 'who captures' to agree with singular 'person'; 'make photos makes memories' is redundant and incorrect—use 'photos create memories'; 'person more enthusiasm' should be 'make a person more enthusiastic' (use adjective 'enthusiastic'). Use present simple for habits and ensure subject-verb agreement ('captures').

× So I would highly recommend all the people that they capture photos outside the scenery of the windows.

✓ So I would highly recommend that people take photos of the scenery outside the windows.

Awkward structure: 'recommend all the people that they capture' should be 'recommend that people take' or 'recommend people to take' (better: recommend that people take). Use base verb 'take' after 'recommend that'. Remove unnecessary 'the' and reorder 'scenery outside the windows'.

× I always prefer mountains oversea because mountains makes me more energetic and and there are greenery over there.

✓ I always prefer the mountains to the sea because the mountains make me more energetic, and there is a lot of greenery there.

Preposition and article errors: 'oversea' is incorrect — use 'to the sea' or 'over the sea' but the common phrase is 'prefer X to Y'; use definite article 'the mountains' and 'the sea'; subject-verb agreement: 'mountains makes' -> 'mountains make'; 'there are greenery' incorrect countable/uncountable: use 'there is a lot of greenery' or 'there are many green areas'.

× If I'm talking about mountains, mountains make me more enthusiastic and it's very good place.

✓ When I talk about the mountains, they make me more enthusiastic and they're a very good place to visit.

Pronoun and article issues: use 'When I talk' instead of 'If I'm talking'; refer to 'the mountains' with pronoun 'they'; 'it's very good place' needs article and infinitive: 'a very good place to visit'. Use present simple for habitual statements.