Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors: use “I enjoy” or “I like” instead of “I keen on,” and say “the mountains and farmland along the route” rather than awkward phrases. Keep it within three sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel. I especially enjoy the mountains and the farmland along the route because they feel peaceful and remind me of my village. For example, the terraced fields and green slopes often catch my eye.

제안: Good clear answer but slightly wordy and formal. Use a concise topic sentence and a brief reason with a linking word. Avoid redundancy like “enjoy and indulge.” Also consider adding a short specific example to make it more vivid.

예시: No, I usually don’t take photos from the car window because I prefer to enjoy the view directly. For instance, when I pass through a valley, I like to watch the changing light rather than stop to take pictures.

제안: Improve grammar and coherence: use a clear comparative structure (“I prefer the mountains to the sea”) and more precise vocabulary. Combine reasons with linking words (e.g. “because” / “as”). Correct plural and article use: “serene vibes” -> “a sense of serenity,” and avoid unsupported absolute statements like “the weather is always hot.” Keep to two or three sentences max.

예시: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I enjoy the cool, fresh air and the sense of calm they provide. For example, hiking in the mountains helps me relax and escape the heat and noise of the city.

× Yes, as far as my experience, I keen on the beautiful scenery during my trip, especially when I'm heading back to my village, such as beautiful mountain and the farmland around along the route.

✓ Yes, based on my experience, I am keen on the beautiful scenery during my trips, especially when I'm heading back to my village, such as the beautiful mountains and the farmland along the route.

Errors: 'as far as my experience' is an incorrect prepositional phrase; use 'based on my experience'. 'I keen' lacks the verb 'am' and is a state verb needing be + adjective. 'during my trip' should be plural 'trips' to match general experience (singular/plural issue). 'such as beautiful mountain' needs plural and definite article: 'the beautiful mountains'. Remove redundant preposition 'around' and keep 'along the route'. Suggestions: use correct prepositional phrases (based on), include linking verbs for stative adjectives (I am keen), match singular/plural for general statements, and use articles with countable nouns.

× I do not take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I just want to enjoy and indulge in the fascinating view that nature provides to me along the route.

✓ I do not take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I just want to enjoy and indulge in the fascinating views that nature provides along the route.

Errors: 'the fascinating view' is acceptable but plural 'views' better matches 'scenery' and a general statement. 'provides to me' is wordy and unnecessary; English usually uses 'provides' without 'to me' in this context. Suggestions: prefer natural collocations ('enjoy the views', 'nature provides') and avoid redundant pronouns when the meaning is clear.

× I prefer mountain than sea.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea.

Errors: 'prefer' takes the preposition 'to' when comparing two nouns. 'mountain' and 'sea' should be in plural/definite forms: 'the mountains' and 'the sea'. Suggestions: use the structure 'prefer A to B' and include articles when referring to general categories (the mountains).

× The main reason is at sea the weather is always hot.

✓ The main reason is that at the sea the weather is always hot.

Errors: Missing complementizer 'that' after 'The main reason is'. Also 'at sea the weather' is awkward; use 'at the sea' or better 'by the sea' or 'at the seaside'. Suggestions: include 'that' to introduce the explanation and use natural prepositions like 'by the sea' or 'at the seaside'.

× Instead in the mountain it can give us a serene vibes, calmness and the fresh air.

✓ Instead, in the mountains it can give us serene vibes, calmness and fresh air.

Errors: 'Instead in the mountain' needs a comma after 'Instead' and 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains'. 'a serene vibes' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' or make 'a serene vibe'. 'the fresh air' can be 'fresh air' without 'the' in general statements. Suggestions: match articles to singular/plural nouns, use commas for discourse markers, and use uncountable nouns without 'the' for general statements.