Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be slightly more concise and avoid redundancy. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Also watch small grammar points ("makes me relax" → "relaxes me") and use more context-specific vocabulary (e.g., "landscapes," "towns," "countryside").

예시: Yes, I always choose a window seat because I enjoy watching the changing landscapes. For example, I like spotting small villages and coastal views as we pass, which relaxes me and makes the journey more memorable.

제안: Good short answer with clear reason. Improve by combining ideas into one coherent response and adding a specific detail about what you photograph. Use a linking word (e.g., "so" or "because") and vary vocabulary (e.g., "capture","memories").

예시: Yes, I often take photos and videos because I like to capture unique moments outside the window, such as interesting architecture or dramatic sunsets, so I can relive the trip later.

제안: Answer clearly with a concise topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct small grammatical issues (remove repeated words, use "especially" correctly) and avoid confusing phrasing ("where I can feel the most heat"). Add a specific detail about what you like about the sea and what attracts you to mountains.

예시: I prefer the sea because I love the relaxed atmosphere and the sound of waves. For example, I enjoy sunbathing and watching the horizon in summer, but I also hope to visit the mountains one day to enjoy hiking and cooler air.

× Every time I book a trip, I always make sure that I am seated by the window because I like seeing different scenarios when traveling.

✓ Every time I book a trip, I always make sure that I sit by the window because I like seeing different scenes when traveling.

The original uses 'I am seated' (passive present continuous) which is awkward here; simple present 'I sit' is more natural for habitual actions. Also 'scenarios' is the wrong noun for landscape/view; 'scenes' or 'sights' is correct. Suggest using simple present for habitual routines and choosing the appropriate noun. Suggestion: Use 'I sit' for regular habits and use 'scenes' or 'sights' instead of 'scenarios'.

× It makes me relax and I feel like I'm in a movie whenever I'm by the window.

✓ It helps me relax and I feel like I'm in a movie whenever I'm by the window.

'Makes me relax' is nonstandard; the correct verb phrase is 'helps me relax' or 'makes me feel relaxed.' Use present simple 'helps' for habitual effect. Keep contractions like 'I'm' consistent. Suggest replacing 'makes me relax' with 'helps me relax' or 'makes me feel relaxed.'

× Yes, I like to take photos and videos whenever I travel.

✓ Yes, I like to take photos and videos whenever I travel.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It correctly uses present simple to express habit. No change needed.

× That's why I like to be seated by the window.

✓ That's why I like to sit by the window.

As above, 'to be seated' is a passive/perfective phrasing that is less natural for expressing preference. Use active infinitive 'to sit' to indicate where you prefer to sit. Suggest 'I like to sit by the window.'

× It helps me remember the experience.

✓ It helps me remember the experience.

This sentence is correct; present simple 'helps' is appropriate to describe a general effect. No change needed.

× I prefer the sea even if I don't know how to swim.

✓ I prefer the sea even though I don't know how to swim.

Use 'even though' rather than 'even if' because the speaker states a fact (they do not know how to swim) contrasted with their preference. 'Even if' suggests a hypothetical. Use present simple 'don't know' for current fact.

× I try to go to the beach once in a while during especially during summer where I can feel the most heat, but I would love to go to mountains in the future.

✓ I try to go to the beach once in a while, especially during the summer when I can feel the most heat, but I would love to go to the mountains in the future.

Multiple issues: duplicate 'during' (remove one), missing article 'the' before 'summer' and before 'mountains' ('the mountains'), and use 'when' instead of 'where' to refer to time. 'Where' is for places; 'when' is for times. Also add a comma after 'a while' for clarity. Suggest: 'once in a while, especially during the summer when I can feel the most heat, but I would love to go to the mountains in the future.'