Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief reason with a linking word. Avoid tense/person shifts and redundant phrases.

예시: Not usually. When I travel by car I often feel dizzy, so I prefer to rest or sleep instead of looking out the window.

제안: Give a direct answer, remove filler words and repetition, and use one clear conditional sentence with a specific reason or example. Use linking words like "if" and "however" correctly.

예시: Sometimes. If I'm feeling well and the view is interesting, I'll take a few photos from the car, but if I'm feeling unwell I usually avoid taking pictures.

제안: Good direct answer and relevant detail. Improve by slightly expanding with one more specific reason or contrast using a linking word to make it more natural and informative.

예시: I prefer the sea because I find it relaxing; for example, I enjoy walking along the shore and feeling the water flow around my feet, whereas the mountains feel too quiet for my taste.

× No, I don't actually.

✓ No, I don't, actually.

Comma needed before 'actually' as an adverb modifying the clause; not a tense error but improves fluency. Suggest pausing: 'No, I don't, actually.'

× We're traveling by car.

✓ We travel by car.

Present continuous ('We're traveling') suggests an action happening now; the question asks about a habitual preference, so simple present 'We travel' is more appropriate for habits.

× I will feel dizzy and it makes me very uncomfortable.

✓ I feel dizzy and it makes me very uncomfortable.

Using 'will' here is inappropriate because dizziness is a habitual or typical reaction when travelling; use simple present 'I feel'. Keep 'it makes me very uncomfortable.'

× I need to rest and sleep.

✓ I need to rest and sleep.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable. It uses simple present to state a general need; no change required.

× It depends on my physical situation.

✓ It depends on my physical condition.

'Physical situation' is awkward; 'physical condition' is the standard collocation. Grammar is correct but wording improved.

× If if I feel better I will choose to take photos of scenery outside the car window.

✓ If I feel better, I will choose to take photos of the scenery outside the car window.

Remove duplicate 'if' and add a comma after the conditional clause. Also insert 'the' before 'scenery' to specify the visible scenery.

× But uh, you really?

✓ But, uh, not really.

Original fragment 'But uh, you really?' is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Not really' succinctly expresses refusal. Use filler 'uh' with commas.

× I don't want to take photos.

✓ I don't want to take photos.

Sentence is correct; uses verb 'want' with infinitive 'to take' properly. No change required.

× I prefer to choose the sea.

✓ I prefer the sea.

'Prefer' takes a direct object; 'to choose' is redundant. Also 'the sea' is the correct article for a general preference between sea and mountains.

× I enjoy the feeling of water flowing through my feet.

✓ I enjoy the feeling of water flowing over my feet.

Water 'flowing through my feet' is unnatural; use 'over my feet' or 'around my feet'. Also sentence is otherwise grammatical.