Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and word choice, avoid redundancy, and keep it within 2–3 concise sentences. Add a brief specific detail about what you enjoy seeing.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car. I find it relaxing to watch passing landscapes, especially green fields and small villages, because it helps me unwind and forget about distractions.

제안: Make the reply more natural and concise. Use a clearer structure: a direct topic sentence followed by one brief reason and one specific example. Avoid overly formal phrasing like “I am used to” and “good command of photography” in this context.

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car window to capture interesting views. For example, I like photographing rivers and old bridges when I travel because the light often looks beautiful.

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and vocabulary. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give two specific, grammatically correct reasons using linking words. Correct word choice (e.g., ‘views of mountains’, ‘climate is milder/challenging’) and singular/plural agreement are important.

예시: I prefer the mountains to the sea. Firstly, I enjoy the cooler, fresher climate in the mountains, which feels more refreshing than the hot seaside. Secondly, the mountain scenery — with forests and ridgelines — feels more peaceful and different from the coastal views near my city.

× I always look out the window at the scenery when travelling by car because I don't want other people disturb me and I want to extremely immerse myself in the beautiful scenery.

✓ I always look out the window at the scenery when travelling by car because I don't want other people to disturb me and I want to immerse myself completely in the beautiful scenery.

Problem types: 8 (Verb + -ing form) and 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns) and 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Explanation: After 'want' the verb should be in the infinitive form with 'to', so 'to disturb' is required. 'Other people disturb me' lacks 'to'. 'Extremely immerse' is unnatural because 'extremely' modifies adjectives more than verbs; use an adverb like 'completely' or place 'extremely' appropriately. Suggestion: Use 'to disturb' and replace 'extremely immerse' with 'immerse myself completely'.

× I am used to taking photos of the scenery outside the car window because I want to record it and I have a good command of photography.

✓ I am used to taking photos of the scenery outside the car window because I want to record it and I have a good knowledge of photography.

Problem type: 8 (Verb + -ing form) and 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Explanation: 'I am used to taking' is correct for a habitual action; no change needed there. However, 'have a good command of photography' is acceptable but sounds odd; 'good knowledge of photography' or 'good command of the camera' are more natural. Suggestion: Keep 'am used to taking' and replace the phrase with a more natural collocation such as 'good knowledge of photography' or 'good command of the camera'.

× I prefer the mountains here as my visions.

✓ I prefer the mountains here as my view.

Problem types: 1 (Singular and plural issue) and 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Explanation: 'Visions' is the wrong noun here; native speakers would say 'view' or 'scenery'. 'My visions' is unusual. Suggestion: Use 'my view' or 'the scenery' to express preference.

× First of all, I think climate matters is very challenging.

✓ First of all, I think the climate is very changeable.

Problem types: 26 (Sentence structure errors) and 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Explanation: 'Climate matters is very challenging' is ungrammatical and unclear. If the speaker means weather/climate changes and is unpredictable, say 'the climate is very changeable' or 'the weather is very variable'. Suggestion: Use a clear subject 'the climate' and a suitable adjective like 'changeable' or 'unpredictable'.

× Second, the views of mothers is very spectacular.

✓ Second, the mountain views are very spectacular.

Problem types: 1 (Singular and plural issue) and 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Explanation: 'views of mothers' is incorrect and likely a lexical error for 'mountains'. Also 'views ... is' disagrees in number; use 'are' with plural 'views'. Suggestion: Replace 'mothers' with 'mountains' and use plural verb 'are' as in 'the mountain views are very spectacular'.

× Last but not least, the city where I live is near the sea, so the mountains is very unique for me.

✓ Last but not least, the city where I live is near the sea, so the mountains are very unique to me.

Problem types: 27 (Subject-verb agreement errors) and 17 (Incorrect use of the definite article). Explanation: 'the mountains is' is incorrect because 'mountains' is plural and requires 'are'. Also English uses 'unique to me' rather than 'unique for me'. Suggestion: Change verb to 'are' and preposition to 'to' as in 'the mountains are very unique to me'.