Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体自然且有内容，但有几处需改进：1) 开头应更直接并用一个主题句（例如：Yes, I always look out of the window when travelling）。2) 避免冗余表达（如“because it will take a long time… So during this time”可合并）。3) 注意时态和主谓一致（“gives me”应与主语一致或改写）。4) 可用一两个连接词（for example, which）使句子更连贯，并补充具体细节如看到的景色或感受的例子。

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps pass the time and relax me. For example, I enjoy watching rolling green hills and small villages pass by, which often makes me feel calm and reflective.

제안: 回答有意义但语法和表达不准确：1) 回答应先用一个简洁的主题句（e.g. Sometimes I do.）。2) 修正语法错误（如“I really like want to”应为“I really want to”或“I really like to”；“take photos is a good way for me to memorising”应改为“taking photos is a good way to remember the moment”）。3) 添加连接词并补充具体例子（什么时候拍、用什么设备、拍什么细节）。

예시: Sometimes I do. When I see an especially beautiful scene, I take photos with my phone to remember it. For instance, I once photographed a golden sunset over a river because the colours and reflection were unforgettable.

제안: 回答表达了喜好和原因，但存在语法和用词问题：1) 用现在时保持一致（不要用过去式“gave”）。2) 用更自然的词汇（“the aisle is fresh”不合适，应为“the air is fresh”）。3) 避免重复形容词（“beautiful and stunning”略显冗余），可补充具体细节（例如喜欢登山的哪一部分、一次具体经历）。4) 用连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: I prefer the mountains because they make me feel calm and peaceful. The air at the top is fresh and I enjoy listening to birdsong while walking along narrow trails, which I find very refreshing.

× Yes, I always like to do this because it will take a long time when we're traveling by bus or car.

✓ Yes, I always like to do this because it takes a long time when we travel by bus or car.

句子中描述的是一般性的习惯或事实，应使用一般现在时。原句用“will take”和“we're traveling”带有将来或进行时，显得不自然。建议使用一般现在时的“takes”和“travel”来表达经常发生的情况。

× So during this time I like to view these stunning landscapes outside of the window that gives me a sense of calm and peace.

✓ So during this time I like to view the stunning landscapes outside the window that give me a sense of calm and peace.

定语从句中先行词“landscapes”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“give”。另外“these”和“the window”在此处可简化为“the stunning landscapes outside the window”。建议注意先行词与动词的一致性，并避免多余的限定词。

× Sometimes because when I see some stunning landscapes outside the window, I really like want to memorize this moment, so take photos is a good way for me to memorising.

✓ Sometimes, when I see stunning landscapes outside the window, I really want to remember the moment, so taking photos is a good way for me to do that.

句子中多处动词形式错误： 1) “really like want” 是不连贯，应使用“really want”表示想要； 2) “so take photos is” 中主语和动名词形式须一致，正确为“taking photos is”； 3) “memorising” 在美式/英式英语中可以用，但句尾应用不定式或名词短语，这里用“do that”或“remember the moment”更自然。建议用动词不与情态动词叠加，并在连词后用动名词作主语。

× I prefer the mountains because it gave me the sense of calm and peace, and when I climb the top mountains, the aisle is fresh and I can hear the bird sounds.

✓ I prefer the mountains because they give me a sense of calm and peace, and when I climb to the top of the mountains, the air is fresh and I can hear birds singing.

存在时态与代词错误： 1) 原句用“gave”（过去式）不符合一般事实的表达，应使用一般现在时“give”； 2) “it gave me”中的“it”指代不明确，正确应以复数代词“they”指代“mountains”； 3) “climb the top mountains” 的搭配不自然，应为“climb to the top of the mountains”； 4) “aisle is fresh” 用词错误，应为“air is fresh”； 5) “bird sounds” 更自然的表达为“birds singing”或“the sounds of birds”。建议注意时态一致、代词指代清晰以及常用搭配（collocation）。

× That's really beautiful and stunning.

✓ That's really beautiful and stunning.

该句语法上无明显介词错误；保留原句。说明：该句为简单评述，没有违反所列语法问题类型，故无需修改。