Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và phát âm để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn; trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh từ thừa và sửa lỗi động từ/giới từ. Hạn chế tiếng ngập ngừng (umm) và dùng liên từ hợp lý khi thêm chi tiết (for example, because, such as). Ví dụ cụ thể: mô tả chính xác những gì bạn thấy (people, buildings, changing light) và giải thích ngắn vì sao bạn thích nhìn ra cửa sổ.

예시: Yes, I do. When I travel by car, I always sit near the window because I enjoy watching the passing scenery. For example, I like observing people walking, interesting buildings, and how the light changes, which helps me relax after a busy day.

제안: Cần dùng cấu trúc câu chính xác để truyền đạt ý (use correct verbs and collocations), tránh những cụm từ không rõ nghĩa như “refer just taking” hay “inner bee”. Nên tổ chức câu: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ. Dùng linking words như "when" và "however" đúng vị trí. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất và nội dung ảnh (e.g., landscapes, sunsets) để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

예시: Occasionally, I take photos from the car, but it depends on my mood. When I'm tired or stressed, I usually just look out the window to relax; however, when I'm in a good mood, I often take pictures of landscapes or interesting buildings to keep as memories.

제안: Cần diễn đạt ý chính rõ ràng: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu sở thích (I prefer the sea). Tránh dùng nhiều tiếng ngắt quãng và những từ sai (e.g., “wake Glen”, “real style”, “happy distressed interlay”). Dùng mô tả cụ thể về trải nghiệm ở biển (sand, waves, sunset) và lý do bạn thích nó. Kết hợp linking words (because, so, for example) để lập luận mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I prefer the sea because I love the peaceful atmosphere. For example, I enjoy lying on the warm sand, listening to the sound of the waves, and watching the sun set over the horizon, which makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.

× Yes, absolutely. When I'm travel by birth of car, I'm always close to the window.

✓ Yes, absolutely. When I travel by bus or car, I'm always close to the window.

The student used 'I'm travel' which mixes present continuous with base verb; the correct simple present 'I travel' should be used for habitual actions. Also 'birth of car' is incorrect vocabulary; 'bus or car' is appropriate. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and choose correct nouns.

× That's an interest I refer socking in the scenery to intelligent in small talk.

✓ That's an interest; I enjoy soaking in the scenery and using it in small talk.

The original sentence contains incorrect word choices ('refer socking', 'intelligent in small talk') and wrong sentence structure. Replace with 'I enjoy soaking in the scenery and using it in small talk' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: use correct verbs (enjoy, soak) and clear noun phrases.

× Umm, watching people, the architecture and the ever changing light cast help me unwind and find my center.

✓ Watching people, the architecture, and the ever-changing light helps me unwind and find my center.

The subject is a series of singular/collective noun phrases, so the verb should be singular 'helps'. Also 'ever changing' needs a hyphen 'ever-changing' as a compound adjective. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and proper adjective formation.

× Well, occasionally it really depends on my mood.

✓ Well, occasionally, it really depends on my mood.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs a comma for clarity: 'Occasionally' is an adverb modifying the clause. No modal error; punctuation improves readability. Suggestion: add commas around sentence adverbs.

× When I feel exhausted by the result of work, money or even family, I refer just taking and checking in the scenery to find my inner bee.

✓ When I feel exhausted because of work, money, or family issues, I just look at the scenery to find my inner peace.

The original has several wrong phrases: 'exhausted by the result of work' should be 'exhausted because of work', 'refer just taking and checking in the scenery' is ungrammatical, and 'inner bee' is wrong word choice for 'inner peace'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('because of') and natural collocations ('look at the scenery', 'inner peace').

× However, when I'm happy state of mind, I will definitely capture the picture to save.

✓ However, when I'm in a happy state of mind, I will definitely take a picture to keep.

Missing preposition 'in' after 'I'm' and awkward verb choice 'capture the picture to save'. Use 'take a picture' and 'keep' or 'save'. Tense 'will definitely' is acceptable for future intention. Suggestion: include necessary prepositions and use natural collocations.

× Uh, I never wake Glen over the sea.

✓ Uh, I never wake up near the sea.

'wake Glen' is nonsensical; likely intended 'wake up near'. Use 'wake up' for waking and 'near the sea' or 'go to the sea'. Suggestion: choose correct verbs and prepositions to express location.

× Uh, there is something, there is something about the real style of the way, uh, happy distressed interlay, uh, moreover, nothing big.

✓ There is something about the sea: the relaxed atmosphere and the way it makes me feel calm; it's nothing complicated.

The original is incoherent and uses incorrect vocabulary ('real style of the way', 'happy distressed interlay'). Rephrase to convey a clear idea: mention relaxed atmosphere and calming effect. Suggestion: simplify sentences and use clear collocations ('relaxed atmosphere', 'makes me feel calm').

× The feeling of lying on the sand and watching, uh, sunset over the horizon.

✓ The feeling of lying on the sand and watching the sunset over the horizon.

Missing article 'the' before 'sunset' and unnecessary comma. Use 'watching the sunset over the horizon' as a complete noun phrase. Suggestion: include definite articles with specific nouns and avoid extra commas.