Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural, relevant and well-organized with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve further, avoid minor word-choice issues and tighten wording to be more concise (max 5 sentences). Add one brief concrete example or comparison to make the detail more specific and memorable.

예시: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel. For example, on a recent bus trip through the countryside I watched rolling green hills and small villages pass by, which helped me relax and stop scrolling on my phone. I find scenery like that much more refreshing than looking at screens.

제안: Your response is generally relevant and includes reasons, but contains a notable word-choice error (“beer” instead of “view” or “scene”) and some awkward phrasing. Correct the vocabulary mistake, combine ideas into coherent sentences using linking words, and give one specific example of when you took a photo to add concreteness.

예시: Yes, I do take photos, but only when the view is really stunning. For instance, last summer I photographed a dramatic sunset over the mountains, though I limited myself to a few shots so I could enjoy the experience rather than spend the whole time behind a camera.

제안: Your answer directly addresses the question and gives reasons with feeling, but there are small grammatical and vocabulary slips (“By this year,” “fresh crisper”). Improve by using correct collocations (e.g., “this year” → “recently” or remove), precise adjectives (“fresh, crisp air”), and include a brief contrast to the sea for balance. Keep it within five sentences.

예시: That's a tough choice, but recently I prefer the mountains. I love the fresh, crisp air, the quiet and the sense of being surrounded by nature. For example, hiking to a ridge and looking out over the valley feels incredibly peaceful, whereas the sea can be more crowded and noisy.

× I do indeed, but only if the beer is really stunning.

✓ I do indeed, but only if the view is really stunning.

The sentence uses the noun 'beer' which is semantically incorrect in this context. The speaker means 'view' or 'scene' outside the window. This is a word choice error (incorrect adjective/noun use). Suggestion: replace 'beer' with 'view' to match context and meaning.

× I can sunset over the mountains or a dramatic coastline.

✓ I can see a sunset over the mountains or a dramatic coastline.

The original sentence is missing the correct verb 'see' and the article 'a' before 'sunset', causing an incorrect sentence structure. 'Can' should be followed by a base verb such as 'see'. Suggestion: use 'I can see a sunset...' or 'I might see a sunset...'.

× By this year, I prefer the mountains.

✓ This year, I prefer the mountains.

The prepositional phrase 'By this year' is awkward and incorrect for expressing a current preference. 'This year' properly indicates the present time period. Suggestion: use 'This year, I prefer...' or 'Lately, I prefer...'.

× I love the fresh crisper, the quiet and the feeling of being surrounded by nature.

✓ I love the fresh crisp air, the quiet, and the feeling of being surrounded by nature.

'Fresh crisper' is incorrect: 'crisper' is comparative adjective and does not fit here. The intended phrase is 'fresh crisp air'. Also add 'air' to complete meaning and include commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'fresh crisp air' or 'crisper air' if comparing.

× Hiking up the mountain and looking out at the view is such an incredible, peaceful experience for me.

✓ Hiking up the mountain and looking out at the view are such incredible, peaceful experiences for me.

The sentence lists two gerund phrases connected by 'and' ('Hiking...' and 'looking...') which form a compound subject; therefore the verb should be plural ('are') to agree. Also 'experience' should be plural to match. Suggestion: use plural verb and noun: 'are such incredible, peaceful experiences'.