Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장이 어색하고 반복이 많습니다. 질문에는 직접적 주제 문장으로 답한 뒤, 이유를 명확하고 간결하게 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 음성 채우기(umm 등)를 줄이고 시제와 대명사 사용을 바로 잡으세요. 예: 주제문(Yes, I usually look out the window.) → 이유(It's relaxing and I prefer watching the scenery rather than using my smartphone.) → 연결어(for example, because 등)를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 이어주세요.

예시: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I find it relaxing and more interesting than staring at my smartphone. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes and people going about their day.

제안: 중복 표현과 어법 오류(문장 형태, 시제, 관사 사용)가 눈에 띕니다. 간결한 주제문(Yes, I often take photos.)을 말한 뒤 이유와 방법을 덧붙이세요. 연결어(and, so, because)를 적절히 사용하고 ‘take photos of the scenery’처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside because I enjoy photography. I usually use either my smartphone or a compact digital camera to capture interesting views while travelling.

제안: 답변이 짧고 비문이 있습니다. 선호를 밝히는 주제문(I prefer the sea.)을 먼저 말하고, 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요(예: sound of waves, relaxing atmosphere). 과거와 현재 시제 혼합을 피하고 연결어(so, because, for example)를 자연스럽게 쓰세요. 불필요한 중복과 음성 채우기를 제거하세요.

예시: I prefer the sea because the sound of the waves and the fresh air help me relax. For example, I often visit the beach to unwind and enjoy long walks along the shore.

× I absolutely look out the window. Umm, because I didn't when we when we look at the smartphone, smartphone is really an inconvenient and not useful. So I did window.

✓ I always look out the window. Umm, because I don't when we look at the smartphone; smartphones are really inconvenient and not useful. So I look out the window.

The student mixes tenses (present and past) incorrectly and has subject-verb agreement and article errors. Use present simple for habitual actions: 'I always look' and 'I don't (look) when we look at the smartphone.' Use plural for the general noun 'smartphones' and adjective 'inconvenient' without 'an'. Also restore omitted verbs: 'I look out the window.' Suggestion: keep present simple for habits and use correct noun number and verb forms.

× Yeah, I absolutely take a photo of outside because I really like photo. So I always did always take a photo and with my digital camera or my smartphone.

✓ Yeah, I always take photos of the outside because I really like photography. So I always take photos with my digital camera or my smartphone.

The student incorrectly used past forms and awkward noun forms. For habitual actions use present simple 'I always take.' Use plural 'photos' and the correct noun 'photography' or 'photos' instead of 'photo'. Remove redundant 'did always'. Suggestion: use present simple for routines and correct noun forms.

× I really prefer UMM sea because sea is comfortable for me and pleasant, so I always went to see Yeah umm.

✓ I really prefer the sea because the sea is comfortable and pleasant for me, so I always go to see it.

The student mixed present preference with past tense 'went'. For current preferences use present simple 'I prefer' and present simple for habitual action 'I always go'. Also use articles with singular nouns 'the sea' and include the pronoun 'it' for clarity. Suggestion: use consistent present tense for general preferences and include definite article where appropriate.