Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'look at the scenic views', 'cars or buses') and avoid incorrect word choices such as 'overwhelming' when you mean 'overwhelmed' or 'refreshed'.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because I enjoy watching changing landscapes. For example, I like spotting small villages and farmlands during long journeys, which helps me relax and pass the time.

제안: Give a direct answer and clarify what you mean. Fix word choice and grammar: 'photogenic' describes a person who looks good in photos — say 'I enjoy taking photos'. Limit to max 5 sentences and add a brief example with linking words ('for example', 'so').

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of the scenery outside the window because it helps me remember the trip. For example, I often photograph interesting fields or mountain views and later organize them into a travel album.

제안: Answer directly and use correct grammar and coherence. Use a linking phrase to explain why and give a specific detail or example. Avoid filler words like 'Uh' and correct verb forms and word order ('Mountains give me a sense of relaxation').

예시: I prefer the mountains because they make me feel relaxed and energized. For instance, I often go hiking in nearby hill stations to enjoy fresh air and quiet trails, which helps me recharge after a busy week.

× Yes, I love to look the scenic views from the windows of cars or bus and I always prefer to have the window seat for this reason.

✓ Yes, I love looking at the scenic views from the windows of cars or buses, and I always prefer to have the window seat for this reason.

Use of verb + -ing: 'love to look' is acceptable but 'love looking' is more natural; after 'look' when referring to seeing something use the preposition 'at' ('look at the scenic views'). Plural consistency: 'cars or bus' should be 'cars or buses'. Also add a comma before 'and' to join clauses. Suggestion: use 'love looking at' and make nouns plural for consistency.

× It makes me feel very overwhelming.

✓ It makes me feel very excited/overwhelmed.

'Overwhelming' is an adjective describing something that overwhelms; to describe a person's feeling use the past participle adjective 'overwhelmed' or a different adjective like 'excited'. Also 'feel very overwhelmed' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: use 'overwhelmed' or 'excited' depending on intended meaning.

× Yes, I am very photogenic person and I love to capture the scenic views and the landscapes which come across my windows through by in while travelling.

✓ Yes, I am a very photogenic person, and I love to capture the scenic views and landscapes that I see from my window while travelling.

Article error and word order: missing article 'a' before 'very photogenic person'. Redundant words and wrong phrasing: 'which come across my windows through by in' is incorrect; use 'that I see from my window' or 'from my windows'. 'the landscapes' can be 'landscapes' without 'the'. Add a comma before 'and'. Suggestion: simplify to clear relative clause 'that I see from my window while travelling'.

× I love mountains. Mountains gives me very relaxing and gives me very positive energy.

✓ I love mountains. Mountains give me a very relaxing and positive energy.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Mountains' is plural so the verb should be 'give' not 'gives'. Word choice and article: 'gives me very relaxing' is ungrammatical; use 'give me a very relaxing and positive feeling' or 'give me very relaxing and positive energy'. Better to include 'a' before 'very relaxing' and combine adjectives correctly. Suggestion: use plural verb 'give' and include appropriate article or noun (e.g., 'feeling').

× Uh. And that is the reason why I used to travel to hilly Station Hill stations more.

✓ And that is the reason why I used to travel to hilly hill stations more often.

Phrase issues and redundancy: 'hilly Station Hill stations' is redundant and unclear. Use 'hilly hill stations' or better 'hilly areas' or 'hill stations'. Tense: 'used to travel' implies past habitual action; if intended meaning is past habit, keep 'used to' and add 'more often' for clarity. Also remove awkward 'Station'. Suggestion: use 'hill stations' or 'hilly areas' and 'more often' to clarify frequency.