Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct articles and word order, and use one or two supporting details with linking words. For example, replace unclear phrases ("bazaar car") with correct words and reduce redundancy ("which like I which I likes").

예시: I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus. For example, I often choose a window seat because I enjoy watching changing landscapes, and this helps me relax during long journeys.

제안: Make your answer more natural and specific. Begin with a clear statement, then give one specific reason and an example. Correct verb forms and simplify sentences to avoid awkward phrasing like "The few ways to looks good."

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window. Because the light and perspective from a window seat can be attractive, I usually take photos of mountains or fields when they look particularly scenic.

제안: Provide a clear preference and support it with concise, relevant reasons using linking words. Avoid vague repetition ("high in the high"); instead give specific descriptions (e.g., fresh air, views) and one balanced comment if mentioning negatives (e.g., dangerous roads).

예시: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the fresh air and wide views, and the scenery feels very peaceful. However, I sometimes worry about narrow or winding mountain roads, so I prefer to visit when weather and road conditions are safe.

× Yes, I look out the window at the scenery.

✓ Yes, I look out of the window at the scenery.

The original sentence is mostly correct but 'look out the window' is colloquially acceptable; however 'look out of the window' is more standard in this context. Use 'look out of' to indicate looking from inside to outside. Suggestion: Use 'look out of the window' for clarity in formal speech.

× When traveling by the bazaar car, I usually travel by the bus.

✓ When traveling by car, I usually take the bus.

'Bazaar car' is unclear and unnecessary. 'Travel by the bus' is grammatically awkward; use 'take the bus' to describe using bus transport. Also avoid repeating 'travel' twice. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing like 'When traveling by car' or 'When I go to the bazaar by car'.

× I take the window seat so many times and look the view of the outside, which like I which I likes most beautiful.

✓ I take the window seat often and look at the view outside, which I like most because it is the most beautiful.

Multiple issues: 'so many times' is awkward—use 'often'. 'Look the view' requires the preposition 'at' (verb + -ing form category applies to gerund usage nearby but primary issue is verb+preposition). 'Which like I which I likes' has pronoun and verb agreement errors; correct to 'which I like'. Also add 'because it is' to make the clause grammatically complete. Suggestion: Simplify and correct word order: 'I often take the window seat and look at the view outside, which I like most because it is very beautiful.'

× The few ways to looks good when we move in a car and window side seat is too good.

✓ There are a few ways to look good when we travel in a car, and the window seat is very good.

'The few ways to looks good' uses incorrect verb form 'looks' (third person singular) after 'to'—should be base form 'look'. 'Move in a car' is awkward; use 'travel in a car'. 'Window side seat is too good' has article and adjective issues; 'the window seat is very good' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'There are a few ways to look good when we travel in a car, and the window seat is very nice.'

× I prefer to take the photos of the beautiful scenery.

✓ I prefer taking photos of the beautiful scenery.

When expressing preferences, both 'prefer to do' and 'prefer doing' are possible. Native speakers often use the gerund ('prefer taking photos') in this general preference context. Suggestion: Use 'I prefer taking photos of the beautiful scenery' for a natural phrasing.

× I like it most.

✓ I like that the most.

'I like it most' is brief but ambiguous. 'That' refers back to 'taking photos of the beautiful scenery' or 'the scenery'. Using 'that' clarifies the reference: 'I like that the most.' Suggestion: Specify the subject: 'I like the scenery the most.'

× I prefer to see the mountains.

✓ I prefer seeing the mountains.

'Prefer to see' is acceptable, but 'prefer seeing' is more natural when comparing general preferences. No article error per se; adjusted to match conversational tone. Suggestion: 'I prefer seeing the mountains.'

× Mountains are too good, high in the high, so high in the height.

✓ Mountains are very impressive and high in elevation.

Phrases like 'too good' and 'high in the high' are ungrammatical or awkward. Use precise adjectives: 'very impressive' or 'tall' and the phrase 'high in elevation' or 'very high.' Suggestion: 'Mountains are very impressive and have great height.'

× They are the beautiful color, natural beauty.

✓ They have beautiful colors and natural beauty.

'They are the beautiful color' is ungrammatical; use 'They have' plus nouns to describe attributes. Combine descriptors: 'They have beautiful colors and natural beauty.' Suggestion: 'The mountains have beautiful colors and natural scenery.'

× Umm, the roads are too dangerous.

✓ The roads can be dangerous.

'Are too dangerous' is grammatical but 'too' implies excessive degree; 'can be dangerous' is more natural and less absolute when giving an opinion. Suggestion: Use modal 'can' to indicate possibility: 'The roads can be dangerous.'