Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No and brief reason), avoid hesitations and irrelevant fragments, and add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep answers under five sentences. Also correct basic grammar (e.g. use continuous forms properly and avoid wrong verbs like “singing on them”).

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because I enjoy observing everyday life. For example, I like watching people on the streets and the variety of shops and buildings we pass. This usually helps me relax and notice small details about the city.

제안: Make the response grammatically correct and clearer: start with a topic sentence (Yes/No + reason), use correct verb forms, and give a specific example of what you photograph and why. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to improve coherence. Keep it concise (1-4 sentences).

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because I like capturing new places we pass. For example, I photograph interesting buildings, street markets, or unusual signs so I can remember the trip and share the sights with friends later.

제안: Give a clear preference or say you like both and explain with specific reasons. Use linking words to contrast (for example, however, while) and give concrete activities or feelings for each choice. Correct sentence structure and avoid filler words. Limit to up to five sentences.

예시: I like both the mountains and the sea, but for different reasons. For instance, I prefer the mountains when I want peace and hiking with family, because the quiet and fresh air help me relax. However, I choose the sea when I want active fun like swimming or beach games with friends.

× I don't when I'm traveling with the bus or by train umm, or maybe by car, I'm always observing people in the streets and observing some businesses and buildings.

✓ I don't when I'm traveling by bus or by train, or maybe by car; I'm always observing people in the streets and looking at businesses and buildings.

The original sentence uses 'with the bus' which is incorrect; use 'by' for modes of transport. Also 'observing some businesses and buildings' is repetitive with 'observing people'; changing the second 'observing' to 'looking at' improves style and clarity. Use a comma or semicolon to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Umm, I like uh, singing on them. It helped me to clean my.

✓ Umm, I like singing about them. It helps me to clear my mind.

'Singing on them' is ungrammatical here; likely the student meant 'singing about them'. 'It helped me to clean my.' is incomplete and uses 'clean my' without an object; 'clear my mind' fits the intended meaning. Also adjust tense to present to match 'I like'. Grammar problem type ID:15

× For example, when I'm traveling, I always taking some pictures on the roads from my car or bus because it's not my side.

✓ For example, when I'm traveling, I always take some pictures of the road from my car or bus because it's not a place I know.

After 'I always' use the base verb 'take' not the -ing form 'taking'. Also 'on the roads' and 'from my car' was unclear; 'take pictures of the road from my car' is natural. 'It's not my side' is incorrect idiom; use 'not a place I know'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× It's not something that I already know. This is new for me so I'm trying to memorize them together.

✓ It's not something I already know. This is new to me, so I'm trying to remember it.

Redundant 'that' can be omitted. 'Memorize them together' is incorrect because the referent is singular; use 'remember it' or 'memorize it'. Also 'new for me' is better as 'new to me'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Uh, sometimes I prefer mountains, sometimes I prefer sea, for example, in mountains and umm, finding peace and I can have fun with my friends and family as well.

✓ Sometimes I prefer the mountains; sometimes I prefer the sea. In the mountains I find peace and can have fun with my friends and family as well.

Use definite articles 'the mountains' and 'the sea' when speaking generally about those environments. The original had awkward structure; separating into clearer sentences and using 'find' instead of 'finding' corrects tense and structure. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Uh, and sometimes in sea it's say, uh, at the beach and in the water and finding.

✓ And sometimes at the sea, I like being at the beach and in the water, enjoying myself.

Original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical: 'in sea it's say' is nonsensical. Rephrase to 'at the sea' or 'by the sea', then state activities 'being at the beach and in the water' and finish with a verb phrase 'enjoying myself'. This fixes sentence structure and completes the idea. Grammar problem type ID:26}]}