Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện: Trả lời nên ngắn gọn và rõ ràng hơn (tối đa 5 câu). Sử dụng thì nhất quán (hiện tại cho thói quen: "I travel/ I travel by car"). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "create" → "creates" hoặc dùng danh từ), chỉnh chủ-động từ ("we passes" → "we pass"). Thêm liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc (ví dụ "and" hoặc "which"), và cung cấp một chi tiết cụ thể hơn (ví dụ: một ví dụ về điều bạn từng nhìn thấy).

예시: I usually look out of the car window when I travel because it makes me feel peaceful and helps me create lasting memories. For example, I often notice small details like colorful rooftops or families working in fields, which remind me of local life. I enjoy taking a few moments to observe these scenes before we arrive.

제안: Cải thiện: Sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác và tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: "I'll I"). Chỉnh thì và trật tự từ ("these scene beauty pictures" → "these beautiful scenes"). Nên thêm liên kết logic ngắn gọn (ví dụ "so that" hoặc "because"). Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về khi bạn đã xem lại ảnh trong tương lai để minh họa. Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I think these beautiful scenes might be useful later. For instance, I photographed a riverside village last year so I could compare how it looked after the rainy season. I usually only take a few clear shots to remember the place.

제안: Cải thiện: Sửa phát âm/viết sai từ ("Mens" → "mountains"). Viết câu hoàn chỉnh với chủ ngữ rõ ràng (tránh "They're just fresh and, and enjoy"). Tránh từ đệm thừa ("uh"). Cung cấp lý do cụ thể, có trật tự và liên kết bằng liên từ (ví dụ "because", "so"). Chú ý ngữ pháp (động từ phù hợp, mạo từ) và một ví dụ cụ thể (một hoạt động bạn làm ở núi). Giữ 2-4 câu rõ ràng.

예시: I prefer the mountains because they feel peaceful and are full of nature. For example, the forests are full of birdsong and fresh air, so I like to go there for picnics with friends and to pick mushrooms. I also prefer mountains to beaches because I don't have to deal with blowing sand.

× I have a small habit of looking at the scenery outside when I traveled by car because it makes me feel peaceful and create lasting memory, and I also enjoy noticing small details and capturing beauty of all the places we passes.

✓ I have a small habit of looking at the scenery outside when I travel by car because it makes me feel peaceful and creates lasting memories, and I also enjoy noticing small details and capturing the beauty of all the places we pass.

The sentence mixes past tense 'traveled' with present habitual 'have a small habit', so use present simple 'travel'. Subject-verb agreement errors: 'it makes' is correct but 'create' should be 'creates' to match singular subject 'it'; 'memory' should be plural 'memories' for general sense; 'passes' is incorrect form for the verb 'pass' with subject 'we' — use base form 'pass'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (present simple) for habits and ensure verbs agree with their subjects.

× Most of the time I'll I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because in my mind I think capturing all of these scene beauty pictures may be useful for the future.

✓ Most of the time I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I think capturing these beautiful scenes may be useful in the future.

Unnecessary contraction and word order: 'I'll I' is incorrect; remove extra 'I'll'. 'in my mind I think' is wordy; use 'I think'. Word choice and article errors: 'all of these scene beauty pictures' is incorrect — correct noun phrase is 'these beautiful scenes' or 'beautiful pictures of scenes'. Use 'in the future' instead of 'for the future'. Suggestion: simplify phrasing, place adjectives before nouns, and use 'in the future'.

× Like when they have changed a lot, I can look back all of the pictures that I have taken.

✓ For example, when the places have changed a lot, I can look back at all of the pictures that I have taken.

Missing preposition 'at' after 'look back'. Clarify subject 'they' to 'the places' for meaning. Use present perfect 'have changed' correctly here, but include 'at' and 'all of' requires 'at all of the pictures' or better 'at all the pictures'. Suggestion: add necessary prepositions and clarify pronouns.

× Well, I prefer Mens because they are peaceful and full of nature.

✓ Well, I prefer mountains because they are peaceful and full of nature.

'Mens' is a wrong word form; use 'mountains'. Pronoun 'they' is fine referring to mountains. Suggestion: use correct noun spelling and form.

× The mountain has uh, lots of trees and birdsong.

✓ Mountains have lots of trees and birdsong.

Singular 'The mountain' conflicts with subsequent plural idea and general preference; use plural 'Mountains have' for general statements. Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: use plural when speaking generally about a category.

× They're just fresh and, and enjoy going there for picnics with their friends and sometimes looking forward mushrooms.

✓ They're just refreshing, and I enjoy going there for picnics with friends and sometimes looking for mushrooms.

Pronoun mismatch and unclear subject: 'They're just fresh' is awkward for landscapes; use adjective 'refreshing'. The clause 'and enjoy' lacks explicit subject — add 'I' if the student is speaking about themselves. 'Looking forward mushrooms' is incorrect phrase — use 'looking for mushrooms'. Suggestion: ensure each clause has an explicit subject and use correct prepositions ('for').

× And also we don't have to get dirty because of the sand that the wind blows to us.

✓ Also, we don't have to get dirty because of sand blown by the wind.

Awkward phrasing 'the sand that the wind blows to us' — passive or reduced relative clause 'sand blown by the wind' is more natural. 'Because of the sand' is acceptable but can be streamlined. Suggestion: use passive reduced relative clause for natural English and drop unnecessary 'to us'.