Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and word choice (e.g., "calms me" not "helps calming down"). Avoid redundancy like "watching the landscapes" and "I also enjoy noticing."

예시: Yes. I always look out of the window because I get carsick; looking at the horizon calms me and reduces my symptoms. Also, I enjoy noticing changing landscapes, such as fields and small villages, which makes the journey more interesting.

제안: Make a direct topic sentence and correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g., "so", "because"). Be specific about why you don’t take photos and offer a brief alternative. Correct vocabulary: "carsick" and "cell" → "carsick" and "phone" or "camera."

예시: No, I usually don’t. Because I get severe carsickness, looking at my phone or taking photos makes me feel worse, so I prefer to stare at the distant horizon and relax instead.

제안: Organize into a clear topic sentence that states your overall position, then give specific seasonal reasons. Fix vocabulary and grammar errors ("sew up the sun" → "soak up the sun", "the sound of the way" → "the sound of the waves"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like "in summer" and "in autumn."

예시: It depends on the season. In summer I prefer the sea because I like to relax and soak up the sun on the beach; the sound of the waves makes me feel calm. In autumn I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the cooler weather.

× Yes I do, I usually get carsick so looking out of the window and watching the landscapes helps calming down and reduce the motion sickness symptoms.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually get carsick, so looking out of the window and watching the landscapes helps me calm down and reduces my motion sickness symptoms.

Errors: incorrect gerund phrase usage and missing object for 'helps', and subject-verb agreement. 'helps calming down' is incorrect; after 'helps' use base form or 'to' infinitive ('helps me calm down'). Also 'reduce' should agree with singular subject 'helps' so use 'reduces'. Add commas and pronoun 'me' for clarity.

× I also enjoy noticing.

✓ I also enjoy noticing the scenery.

Sentence is incomplete and vague. 'Noticing' is a verb that needs an object. Adding 'the scenery' clarifies the meaning and makes the sentence grammatically complete.

× No I don't because I have severe car sick.

✓ No, I don't because I get severe car sickness.

'Car sick' is an adjective phrase; the correct noun is 'car sickness' or use 'I get car sick.' Also 'severe car sick' is ungrammatical. Use comma after 'No'. Present-tense habitual 'I get' fits context.

× Looking at the cell for a long time would make my symptoms more serious.

✓ Looking at the screen for a long time makes my symptoms worse.

Use the correct noun 'screen' instead of 'cell' (informal). 'Would make' is conditional; here a general truth requires simple present 'makes'. 'More serious' is acceptable but 'worse' is more natural.

× I usually just looking out of the window and watching the different scenes to relax.

✓ I usually just look out of the window and watch the different scenes to relax.

After 'usually' use the base verb form for simple present: 'look' and 'watch', not the -ing form. This corrects tense and verb form for habitual action.

× It depends on the season.

✓ It depends on the season.

This sentence is correct. It uses the simple present appropriately to describe a general truth; no change needed.

× In summer I prefer the sea because I like to unwind and sew up the sun on the beach.

✓ In summer I prefer the sea because I like to unwind and soak up the sun on the beach.

'Sew up' is a misspelling; correct phrasal verb is 'soak up' meaning to enjoy sunlight. 'Unwind' is fine. Maintain present tense for preferences and habits.

× The sound of the way always made me feel calm.

✓ The sound of the waves always makes me feel calm.

'Way' is incorrect; intended word is 'waves'. Also tense should be simple present 'makes' to match habitual feeling. 'Always' with present tense indicates a regular effect.

× In autumn I prefer to. I prefer mountains because I like hiking. I in.

✓ In autumn I prefer the mountains because I like hiking.

Original contains fragments and repetition. Combine ideas into one complete sentence: use 'the mountains' (definite article) and complete the phrase 'I prefer the mountains' and give reason. Remove incomplete fragment 'I in.'