Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition; give a clear topic sentence then a brief supporting detail. Use one linking phrase and avoid filler sounds. For example, state when or why you look out the window and a short specific detail about what you enjoy seeing.

예시: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching changing landscapes. For instance, I like spotting old houses and small farms along country roads, which helps me relax during the journey.

제안: Be more fluent and expand slightly with a reason and a small example. Replace pauses with a linking word (because, so) and give one specific situation when you might take photos.

예시: Not usually, because I prefer to stop and enjoy the view in person. However, if the scenery is unusual — for example, a dramatic mountain sunrise — I would take a quick photo to remember it.

제안: Give a direct answer (mountains or the sea), then add a short reason and a specific detail. Avoid unclear phrases and pronunciation issues — say ‘sea’ clearly. If you have limited experience, say so and explain what attracts you to the option you choose.

예시: I prefer the sea because I enjoy the openness and the sound of waves, although I haven't had many chances to visit. For example, I imagine walking along a sandy beach at sunset would be very relaxing.

× Yes, absolutely. I'm uh, I would do it every time like I would like to, I would like to I, I, I like the view outside. I want to see it.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I do it every time; I like the view outside and want to see it.

The original has redundant and incorrect use of 'I'm uh, I would do it every time like I would like to...'. This mixes conditional 'would' with a habitual present meaning. Use simple present 'I do it every time' for habitual actions. Remove filler repetition and combine clauses for clarity. Also use a semicolon or conjunction to connect related ideas. Grammar problem type ID:10

× I barely do that because I want to stop and, uh, go out and to see the view.

✓ I hardly ever do that because I want to stop and go out to see the view.

'Barely' is not the best adverb for frequency here; 'hardly ever' or 'rarely' fits. 'Stop and, uh, go out and to see' contains an unnecessary 'to' before 'see' and redundant 'and'. Use the base form after 'go out' ('go out to see'). Also remove filler 'uh'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× How much prefer the seed because I I didn't get a chance to see it.

✓ I prefer the sea because I haven't had a chance to see it.

The original 'How much prefer the seed' is ungrammatical and contains lexical errors ('seed' for 'sea'). The question asks preference; the student should state a clear preference with subject and verb: 'I prefer the sea.' The reason uses a perfect construction for an experience up to now: 'I haven't had a chance to see it.' Also remove repeated 'I'. Grammar problem type ID:26