Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答自然但有一些语法和表达不准确、重复以及句子略长。建议：1) 开头给出更直接的主题句（1句）。2) 精简并修正语法错误（如时态、一致性和冠词）；避免重复的填充词（uh, maybe, that）。3) 使用连接词使句子更流畅（for example, because）。4) 提供一两个具体细节以支持观点（例如颜色、景物种类、变化）。举例练习句子不超过5句。

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window because I find the passing countryside scenes more charming than crowded tourist spots. For example, last year when I drove through Sichuan to Mount Emei, I saw terraced fields, pine forests and winding rivers that changed constantly. Because the views were so varied, I felt they were more memorable than a single landmark.

제안: 回答意思清楚但有重复和语法混乱、口语填充较多。建议：1) 开头直接回答（Yes/No），随后给出原因。2) 去掉重复短语，改用更地道的表达（e.g. because the motion blurs photos）。3) 可补充具体例子或时间（when/where），并用连接词衔接。4) 控制长度，最多5句。

예시: Not really. I rarely take photos from a moving car because the motion usually blurs the pictures. Instead, I prefer to enjoy the view with my eyes and store the memory that way. For instance, during a recent road trip the landscape changed so quickly that photos didn’t capture the feeling anyway.

제안: 回答清晰但有语法错误和重复，且部分表述不够地道。建议：1) 先给出明确主题句（I prefer the mountains.）。2) 用正确的动词形式和名词（e.g. walking slowly, hearing the birds）。3) 提供具体原因并可作比较（e.g. quieter, fresher air, shaded trails vs. open beaches）。4) 删除重复词并使用连接词（because, moreover）。

예시: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy walking slowly in forests and listening to birdsong. The air feels fresher and the trails are peaceful, which suits me more than noisy beaches. For example, a hike in the mountains relaxes me in a way that a seaside trip usually doesn’t.

× Yeah, definitely I do because I believe that maybe the scenery which you happen to see are usually much more beautiful than the scenery in the tourist attractions.

✓ Yeah, definitely I do because I believe that maybe the scenery which you happen to see is usually much more beautiful than the scenery in tourist attractions.

错误类型：现在时/主谓一致。原因：关系从句中的主语“the scenery”是单数，谓语应使用单数形式“is”；此外“the scenery in tourist attractions”前通常不需要定冠词“the”。建议：把“are”改为“is”，并将“the scenery in the tourist attractions”改为“scenery in tourist attractions”。

× For example, this years I went to Sichuan province and we are driving to the, uh, May Mount and I found that that the scenery, uh, when by car is more beautiful.

✓ For example, this year I went to Sichuan Province and we were driving to May Mountain, and I found that the scenery from the car was more beautiful.

错误类型：句子结构和时态搭配问题。原因：应使用单数时间短语“this year”（不是“this years”）；既然叙述过去的经历，整句应使用过去时（we were driving, was）；地名也应规范为“May Mountain”；“the scenery when by car”表达不自然，改为“the scenery from the car”。建议：把“this years”改为“this year”，将现在进行时改为过去进行时/过去时，调整短语顺序使表达自然。

× Well, not as much as I'd love to because you know when you are in the car, the speed, the speed make your make the photos make the photos are just not very clear enough.

✓ Well, not as much as I'd like, because when you are in the car, the speed makes the photos not very clear.

错误类型：词类和冗余问题（副词/形容词使用与重复）。原因：惯用表达是“I'd like”而不是“I'd love to”在该句中；重复短语“the speed, the speed make your make the photos make the photos”是冗余且语法混乱；动词“make”第三人称单数需加“s”。建议：删去重复内容，使用“It makes the photos not very clear”或“makes photos blurry”。

× So instead of taking photos, I prefer to admire them through my own eyes.

✓ So instead of taking photos, I prefer to admire the view with my own eyes.

错误类型：代词使用错误。原因：“admire them”中“them”模糊不清，指代不明确，且与后面的“through my own eyes”搭配不自然。建议：将“them”改为更明确的名词短语“the view”并用“with my own eyes”更地道。

× I think it's a better way for me to memorize them.

✓ I think it's a better way for me to remember them.

错误类型：动词选择/时态问题。原因：英文中“memorize”多指刻意记忆，而这里表达通过肉眼欣赏来记住更自然应使用“remember”。建议：用“remember”替换“memorize”。

× Well, I prefer the scenery in the mountains because I love just walking, Walking slowly in the forest and I can hearing the voice of the birds and I can also experience the fresh air, which I can't experience experience just beside the sea.

✓ Well, I prefer the scenery in the mountains because I love just walking slowly in the forest, and I can hear the birds' voices and also experience the fresh air, which I can't experience just beside the sea.

错误类型：冠词与动词形式错误。原因：句中“Walking”不应大写且与前句重复断裂；“I can hearing”动词形式错误，应为“hear”；“the voice of the birds”更自然为“the birds' voices”；句尾有重复单词“experience”。建议：将分句连成一句，使用“walking slowly”，“hear”，“birds' voices”，去掉重复的“experience”。