Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response grammatically correct and more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and articles (e.g., “the bus” → “a bus” or omit article when speaking generally). Avoid redundancy (don’t repeat ‘scenery’ and ‘landscape’ without adding new information).

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy observing the local scenery. For example, when I visit a new place, I usually take a few photos and share them online to remember the trip.

제안: Improve clarity and grammar by using one clear reason and a specific example. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and avoid fragmented sentences. Fix subject-verb agreement and pronouns. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and finish the thought (e.g., how photos help you).

예시: Yes, I often photograph scenery outside the car window because some viewpoints are only accessible by road or rail. For instance, on a recent train trip I captured dramatic cliffs that I could never reach on foot, and those photos help me remember the route and show friends what I saw.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with two clear, specific reasons. Correct word choice (e.g., ‘sea’ not ‘see’; ‘surfing’ and ‘snorkeling’; avoid ‘starving’ which is incorrect here). Use linking words (because, and) and keep sentences concise and grammatically correct.

예시: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and surfing, which I can’t do in the mountains. Also, the sea offers many interesting activities like snorkeling and beach sports, and I like the fresh sea air and seafood available nearby.

× Yes, I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel by the bus and car because I admiring the scenery and landscape.

✓ Yes, I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I admire the scenery and landscape.

The original contains an incorrect present participle 'admiring' after the main clause; a simple present 'admire' is required to match 'I enjoy' and the habitual present tense. Also 'the bus and car' should be 'bus or car' for general means of transport and articles are unnecessary before 'bus' and 'car' in this context. Suggestion: use simple present verbs for habitual actions and use 'or' to list alternatives.

× And when I visit a place for the first time, I often take photos and share them online to remember the trip.

✓ And when I visit a place for the first time, I often take photos and share them online to remember the trip.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No pronoun error present. Keep as is. (Included because instruction 2 requires only listed types; here no change needed.)

× Definitely yes, I love photographing and I love taking photos of the scenery outside the car window because I think some places that we can't walk to that place but it only have the railway of car or even the train.

✓ Definitely yes, I love photographing and I love taking photos of the scenery outside the car window because I think some places we can't walk to, and there may only be a road for cars or a railway for trains.

Errors include article misuse and awkward phrasing. 'that place' is redundant, 'it only have' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and number; use 'there may only be' to introduce existence. 'the railway of car' is incorrect — replace with 'a road for cars' and 'a railway for trains'. Suggestion: use 'there is/are' for existence and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× So I love taking photo of this view and I would help me to.

✓ So I love taking photos of this view because they help me remember it.

Original has wrong noun number 'photo' should be plural 'photos', and 'I would help me to' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use a clear clause 'they help me remember it' to state purpose. Suggestion: make subject clear and use correct verb form for purpose.

× I would prefer to see because I love swimming and surfing, so I love to see very much.

✓ I prefer the sea because I love swimming and surfing, so I really enjoy being by the sea.

'I would prefer to see' is incorrect and unclear; use present preference 'I prefer the sea'. 'I love to see very much' is awkward — replace with 'I really enjoy being by the sea'. Maintain present tense for general preferences.

× And also I think many activities from the sea is interesting like the starving and also the snorkeling and from the sea we can enjoy many different fresh sea.

✓ Also, I think many activities at the sea are interesting, like sailing and snorkeling, and we can enjoy many kinds of fresh seafood.

Multiple errors: 'from the sea' should be 'at the sea' or 'by the sea'; subject-verb agreement 'activities ... is' should be 'are'; 'the starving' is incorrect word choice — likely 'sailing'; 'different fresh sea' is meaningless — likely 'fresh seafood'. Suggestion: choose correct nouns ('sailing', 'snorkeling', 'fresh seafood') and ensure subject-verb agreement and proper prepositions.