Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail and a brief linking phrase. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., "scenery" uncountable, remove duplicate words).

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I find it entertaining. For example, I enjoy watching changing architecture and people on the street, which helps me pass the time more pleasantly.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar and use linking words. Be specific about what would prompt you to take a photo and avoid awkward phrases like "out of my exception." Use past vs present consistently.

예시: Not usually. I only take photos if the view is particularly striking or unusual; otherwise I prefer to simply observe. For instance, I photographed a dramatic sunset once because the colours and clouds were extraordinary.

제안: Answer directly, correct vocabulary and grammar, and avoid filler words. Replace incorrect word "hate" with "heights" and remove repeated words. Add one clear reason and a brief example or image, using linking words for coherence.

예시: I definitely prefer the sea because I'm a bit afraid of heights, so I can't fully enjoy mountain views. Moreover, the sea feels relaxing; for example, I find it calming to sit by the shore and listen to the waves while reading.

× Definitely yes, otherwise it would be a pretty boring trip.

✓ Definitely yes, otherwise it is a pretty boring trip.

The sentence mixes conditional mood with a general present-tense statement. The question asks about habitual behavior, so use present tense 'is' for a general truth rather than 'would be' which suggests a hypothetical situation.

× I prefer watching sceneries go by or observing the people on the streets.

✓ I prefer watching scenery go by or observing people on the street.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries.' Also, 'people on the streets' is more natural as 'people on the street.' The gerund 'watching' is correct; only nouns needed adjustment.

× I didn't overthink it.

✓ I don't overthink it.

The student describes a habitual preference, so present simple 'don't overthink' fits better than past 'didn't overthink,' which suggests a one-time action. Use present tense for regular habits.

× I I just want to kill my time.

✓ I just want to kill time.

Repeating 'I' is a typographical error. The idiomatic expression is 'kill time' without the possessive 'my.' Also 'want' is present simple and matches the habitual context.

× Not really, only when the scenery was beautiful or out of my exception I would like to take photos and in most of the case I just observed them and record it in my eyes.

✓ Not really. Only when the scenery is beautiful or out of the ordinary would I like to take photos, and in most cases I just observe them and keep the memory in my mind.

Multiple tense and word-choice errors: use present simple 'is' for general habits, 'out of the ordinary' is the correct phrase instead of 'out of my exception.' 'Would I like' fits conditional preference but should follow inversion 'would I like' after 'only when...' The latter part needs present simple 'observe' for habitual action and 'keep the memory in my mind' is a natural expression instead of 'record it in my eyes.' Also 'in most of the case' should be 'in most cases.'

× And definitely the sea because I'm a little afraid of the hate so it it is difficult for me to enjoy the Mountain View.

✓ Definitely the sea, because I'm a little afraid of heights, so it is difficult for me to enjoy the mountain view.

'Hate' is incorrect; the intended word is 'heights.' Remove the duplicate 'it.' 'Mountain View' should be lowercase 'mountain view' unless it's a proper noun. The sentence structure is otherwise fine.

× But the sea was very relaxed.

✓ But the sea is very relaxing.

The student is making a general preference statement, so present tense 'is' fits better than past 'was.' Also 'relaxed' describes a person; 'relaxing' describes the sea's effect.

× And imagine that working by the sea with the waves around you, that sounds relaxing.

✓ Imagine working by the sea with the waves around you; that sounds relaxing.

The original has an unnecessary 'that' after 'imagine' and punctuation issues. Removing the extra 'that' and using a semicolon or period clarifies the two linked ideas. The verb forms are appropriate for imagining a general situation.