Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคและการใช้ไวยากรณ์ รวมถึงการเลือกคำให้เป็นธรรมชาติและกระชับ ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคตรงตอบคำถาม แล้วเสริมเหตุผลและตัวอย่างสั้น ๆ ใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น 'because' หรือ 'so'. ให้ระวังคำผิดและการใช้วลีที่ไม่ถูกต้อง (เช่น 'out of the window' -> 'look out of the window', 'it feel very bored' -> 'I feel bored').

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I get bored sitting still. Watching the scenery makes the journey more interesting, especially when I see busy streets or old buildings, so I can relax and pass the time.

제안: แก้คำศัพท์และความหมายที่สับสน และจัดลำดับความคิดให้ชัดเจน ควรตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคชัดเจนแล้วอธิบายเพิ่มเติมด้วยตัวอย่างหรือสถานการณ์จริง หลีกเลี่ยงการใช้วลีที่ไม่ถูกต้อง (เช่น 'change bottles' ไม่มีความหมายที่เหมาะสม และ 'popular players' หรือ 'Goodwill' น่าจะไม่ใช่สิ่งที่ต้องการกล่าวถึง)

예시: Not really. I rarely take photos out of the car window because the view is often blurred while the vehicle is moving. However, if I see a beautiful landscape or an interesting building, I sometimes stop and take a quick picture to share on Facebook.

제안: ปรับการใช้ไวยากรณ์และการเปรียบเทียบให้ถูกต้อง เช่น 'prefer the mountains to the sea' และแก้รูปแบบคำกริยาและคำสรรพนาม ให้ขยายเหตุผลด้วยรายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น กิจกรรมหรือความรู้สึกที่ทำให้ชอบภูเขา เพื่อให้คำตอบมีความเฉพาะเจาะจงมากขึ้น

예시: I prefer the mountains to the sea because they are quieter and full of trees and fresh air. I enjoy hiking and listening to birds there, which helps me relax more than being at a crowded beach.

× Yes I am always out of the window because when I go travelling by bus or car it feel very bored but when I look outside it make me feel excited.

✓ Yes, I am always looking out of the window because when I travel by bus or car it feels very boring, but when I look outside it makes me feel excited.

The sentence uses incorrect verb forms and tense consistency. Use present continuous 'am always looking' for habitual actions with emphasis, simple present 'travel' for habitual action, third person singular agreement 'it feels' and 'it makes'. Also use adjective 'boring' instead of past participle 'bored' and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent tense: 'I am always looking out of the window because when I travel by bus or car it feels very boring, but when I look outside it makes me feel excited.'

× I like the town aloud.

✓ I like the town aloud.

The original sentence likely intended 'I like the town a lot' or 'I like the town aloud' is incorrect because 'aloud' means 'out loud' and doesn't fit context. Replace with 'a lot' or 'the town's atmosphere' depending on meaning. Suggested correction: 'I like the town a lot.'

× Not much, I only change bottles of the scenery outside the car window.

✓ Not much, I only take photos of the scenery outside the car window.

The phrase 'change bottles' is incorrect and likely a mistranslation. Use the verb 'take' with 'photos' to describe photographing. Also keep simple present for habits: 'I only take photos.'

× Sometimes when I see the popular players or the Goodwill I will check the photo to post on my Facebook.

✓ Sometimes when I see popular places or something interesting I will check the photos to post on my Facebook.

The phrase 'popular players or the Goodwill' is unclear; likely meant 'popular places' or 'goodwill' is wrong noun. Also 'check the photo' should be plural 'photos' if taking multiple, and 'something interesting' fits. Maintain future-in-present 'I will' is acceptable for intention. Suggestion: use correct nouns: 'places' and plural 'photos'.

× I prefer the mountain than the sea because the mountain has lot of tree like forest.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because the mountains have a lot of trees like a forest.

Use plural 'mountains' when comparing generally and preposition 'prefer X to Y'. 'Has lot of tree' needs article 'a' and plural 'trees'. Also 'like forest' should be 'like a forest'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'mountains have'.

× I think it is good atmosphere and made me feel feel fresh.

✓ I think it has a good atmosphere and makes me feel fresh.

Use present simple 'has' to describe a current quality and 'makes' for third person singular. 'Made' is past tense and should be present 'makes'. Remove duplicate 'feel'. Add article 'a' before 'good atmosphere'.